Wednesday, July 27, 2011

Her Grown-up Past Smiles..



Fumble , Glance, Banter..... 3WW.. prompts which indeed threw a challenge for a haiku..



She fumbles to glance
Banter appears familiar, ah,
Her grown-up past smiles

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She fumbles again
Gets stuck, banter stops, present
Glances and wonders...

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A harsh, angry glance
Past fumbles, no more banter
She moves with present



By RS  : )

10 comments:

  1. Nice work on all of them. The last is my favorite.

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  2. As a triptych the three pieces tell a really interesting tale.

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  3. From young girl to a woman it sounds to me.
    Great peice!
    Love it
    Blessings

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  4. Thats a transformation...and that too a lovely one...but growing can cost a lot...yet i guess inevitable...

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  5. Confronting opposition is the best way to end unwanted banter and move on. Treating serious issues with deliberately inappropriate humor is improper.

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  6. So much said in so little... a biography of every woman.... so precise... so beautiful so true.. how observant...

    Thank you sir... you see all and capture all... it felt so special to have been understood without sharing a word

    Regards

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  7. Hi Ramesh..this seems like a new format..three short pieces that could stand alone or as verses in a larger piece..I imagine someone looking in the mirror..trying to match a their age to their face..brave to imagine that female voice..yet, so well done..Jae (ps my security word was bless..seemed apt)..

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  8. you did a great job with this! very evocative.

    peace,
    deborah

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  9. Very clever. She grows up in just three haikus. Well done.

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