Ochre Spilled..
A cluster of dark clouds
Teased and grilled
Oh, dear, dear! Rainbow cried
And lo! Ochre spilled..
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Ah! Bodily Desires...
Spirit hovers around
Somewhere afar
Quietly gathering all the dust
Hey, bury the body deep
Under the layers of ochre
Let it not rust..
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Original Sunday Post
When I visited the OSI page yesterday night, I got inspired to try writing something not only using 'Ochre' but also all the other prompts from the time I got acquainted with this wonderful source of inspiration..hope you will find it interesting..do let me know if I succeeded in this effortless endeavor..
An Ounce of Melted Ochre
Wasn’t it me sitting cringed
In a darker corner
Of an oubliette
In my own inner space
Created out of imaginary walls
Behind which the light hid
Without giving cognizance
To all that surrrounded me
As I thought of seeking help
From the waxed wings of Icarus
To take a flight
From that opening
Where mind was open
Just a little enough
To float through
And reaching out to
A newer dawn, where
Love reigned
I did not find my thoughts
Trembling with fear
No fissures appeared in my resolve
I knew from the core of my heart
That the newer world would be
A Stranger, an enigma
Wearing an invisible mask
For my untouched spirit
That craved to get insulated
Against rust of impurity and ignorance..
Will a coating of
An ounce of melted Ochre be enough
Only if I can know
I would seek God’s soothing hands
For a smooth healing touch
Yes, One thing is certain
God always willingly joins
In any effort being made
To make the spirit spotless
Even if one is vicariously tilted
Towards the world that beckons..
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Beautiful! :)
ReplyDeleteyou have made words fit so well!
ReplyDeleteThank you for this intensely visual, beautiful poem. That vicarious life--I know it well.
ReplyDeleteDear Ramesh,
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Beautifully expressed themes!touching lines!Words are too good!
Wishing you a lovely night,
Sasneham,
Anu
You did a great job with all those words. Excellent.
ReplyDeletegood one....yes u indeed succeeded.....n its interesting 2
ReplyDeleteloved "For my untouched spirit
That craved to get insulated
Against rust of impurity and ignorance..SIMPLY AWESOME WORDS :)
Brilliant! Words that fit so well!
ReplyDeleteThats absolutely brilliant and inspiring write up..:) Thanks fr the pleasure
ReplyDeleteI don't know how you did it, but it makes sense and is lovely, too. Congrats!
ReplyDeletehttp://meeyauw.blogspot.com/2010/06/one-single-impression-ochre.html
I liked the thoughts that came from your compilation. Are you an engineer? That sounds like a project us as engineers might take on. You did really good.
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Excellent effort combining the previous themes together. Your poem brought out visual images for me also. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you, friends, all of you foryour encouraging comments..and your appreciation..enjoyed it a lot..
ReplyDelete@No Jim I am not an Engineer, Thank God life is a little easier.. and trust me it was an effortless endeavour..by grace of God the words got connected..I didn't do much ..it just happened..sometimes effort in things like these spoils..what do you say..
Enoyed...very nice
ReplyDeleteA beautifully written poem! Thanks for sharing!
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You did a terrific job of using so many prompt words and producing a delightful piece!
ReplyDeletePowerfully written! I love your use of imagery and of course incorporating so many prompt words while maintaining the flow of the piece. Great work!
ReplyDeleteYou did an amazing job with all three, but I loved what you did with the last one. Perfectly written- tht was quite a challenge but you succeeded!
ReplyDeleteOchre spill.... captured so well! Wonderful read.
ReplyDeleteThis is my first visit here.
ReplyDeleteWill return soon.
Thanks every one for very encouraging comments and liking my post..
ReplyDelete@Mr. Chowla.. I am happy to find you here on this page.. Thanks a lot.. hope you found your first visit interesting.. Thanks.. how do I reach your page.. tried.. couldn't get there..
Dear Ramesh, you did really very good job with all three, I enjoyed it :)
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Marinela x
Ramesh, beautiful poetry. So creative. I love them all
ReplyDeleteMelanie
I went through your OSI prompts and then I read Ochre again... and it is a wonderful way of words reflecting words.
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you have expressed well the cornering of one's mind and the subtle battle to conquer the existing unknowns into the arms of one of can even as we turn backward seeking that darkness where we just came from.. why just the other day i acknowledge this same experience... you have touched an emotion we all know....
ReplyDeleteochre spilled was a fun read!
ReplyDeleteI like ' Bodily Desire' - it sounds like a neverending thought, that the spirit lives on even if the body doesn't
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