Saturday, February 19, 2011

Yes, the City Looked Very Small…

Written for OSI prompt: TOP

Thanks to Sandra ..for a prompt that gave me a chance to write on something I have always believed ..

Yes, the City Looked Very Small…


A wise man told me years ago,
“ You must try to reach the top”
I walked on and on, ran,
Sprinted and jumped, looked all around
But couldn’t see the top
And then one day I looked up
Towards edge of the city, and
I knew what the wise man meant
It took me a lot of hard work
Had to Negotiate difficult turns,
Brave rough weathers on the way
But then finally I reached
The top of the hill, that
Had beckoned me for years
Wow, the sky was so near
And I could touch moon
With my hands
Stars twinkled in my eyes
That’s when I looked down
And lo, from top of the hill
I could see the city spread
Far down below, so small
I could place it on my palm
Euphoria of having reached
Started catching me unawares
When a thought hit me
Like a bolt of light
Yes, city looked very small,
But then, those living there
No they couldn’t see me at all…
Ah, what a disconnect..
I suddenly felt lonely
And began preparing myself
To return to where I belonged
As I realized - Reaching skies
Was all the more beautiful
When one remained connected
With the ground ... where
One can see others happy
And smiling and be seen too
Yes, that too is a human need..

- RS
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30 comments:

  1. NankaFebruary 19, 2011 at 9:44 PM

    Yes RS!! You have done an excellent job here and beaten your very best in this marvelous poem!!

    I would rate this as the best in recent past.

    Such wonderful thoughts and great sentiments expressed in pure simplicity!!

    No single line but the entire poem makes a mark!!

    Kudos!!

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  2. Tammie LeeFebruary 19, 2011 at 10:10 PM

    ah, a wonderful contemplation on what is important.

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  3. Neena SharmaFebruary 19, 2011 at 10:47 PM

    Hi Ramesh, thanks for visiting my blog. The admiration is mutual. Enjoyed your poem thoroughly.Shall be back for more.

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  4. Harshad MehtaFebruary 20, 2011 at 12:23 AM

    Yes. There is a deep desire to remain connected. Well expressed.

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  5. Harshad MehtaFebruary 20, 2011 at 12:24 AM

    Yes. There is a deep desire to remain connected. Well expressed.

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  6. Gemma WisemanFebruary 20, 2011 at 12:50 AM

    A delightful journey of thoughts! Especially liked the final awakening that "Reaching skies
    Was all the more beautiful
    When one remained connected
    With the ground..."

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  7. anthonynorthFebruary 20, 2011 at 1:46 AM

    An excellent point in this. The top is not always a good place.

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  8. Kodjo DeynooFebruary 20, 2011 at 2:17 AM

    A lot of wisdom here, and I thank you for sharing this

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  9. Aayushi MehtaFebruary 20, 2011 at 2:48 AM

    Very true. You say it perfectly :)

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  10. Rinkly RimesFebruary 20, 2011 at 3:23 AM

    To aim high but keep one's attachments to the low.....let's hope it can be done.

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  11. AnonymousFebruary 20, 2011 at 4:52 AM

    an experience we should not miss!!

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  12. AnonymousFebruary 20, 2011 at 9:19 AM

    Fantastic words and great advice to stay connected. Love this.

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  13. JimFebruary 20, 2011 at 9:27 PM

    Wonderful thoughts, Ramesh. Thank you.
    All the time I was reading it I was thinking of two metropolitan mountains I have climbed. The first was in Hot Springs National Park in Arkansas, U.S. The second was Mont Real in Montreal, Canada.

    The funny part though, was that I drove up to the top of both of those little mountains. Those climbs were easy.

    I did climb another mountain quite regularly in El Paso, Texas. Sometimes I would ride the cable car back down.
    ..
    Thank you again for these memories.
    ..

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  14. eyeographyFebruary 21, 2011 at 12:37 AM

    Beautiful work Sir :)

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  15. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 8:46 AM

    A wonderful journey! I loved the summing up at the end, about people having the need to be seen.

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/02/21/home/

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  16. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallFebruary 21, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    Fabulous!
    A++

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  17. Mike and Sandy PatrickFebruary 21, 2011 at 10:13 AM

    Once a goal is reached, life is evaluated and a new goal is set. So is man, and mankind advanced. Beautiful poem.
    Mike
    http://thepoetsquill.wordpress.com/

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  18. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 10:25 AM

    What a profound realization... that the greatest heights are never far, and connection with others part of the plan. This is a keeper!!

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  19. DeLiFebruary 21, 2011 at 11:24 AM

    feet on the ground and looking up in the sky is not so bad at all

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  20. Lisa at GreenbowFebruary 21, 2011 at 4:44 PM

    Yes, the top can be worrisome. You must stay connected to what grounds you. Marvelously said.

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  21. SandyCarlsonFebruary 21, 2011 at 6:03 PM

    Touching heaven without leaving earth, we become as heaven, I think. A beautiful poem.

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  22. The Write GirlFebruary 21, 2011 at 7:46 PM

    Beautiful poetry...I think you've described the dilemma of reaching the top while wanting to connect with those down on earth. Wonderful words that comes from the heart.

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  23. Geraldine February 21, 2011 at 10:28 PM

    You made it Ramesh! Thank you for the journey and for this great interpretation of the prompt. Well said.

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  24. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2011 at 10:48 PM

    lovely realization.. lifes a discovery.. nice ramesh.. my potluck's here: http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/04/metamorphosis/

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  25. SMFebruary 22, 2011 at 3:51 AM

    beautiful thoughtful lines

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  26. ms pieFebruary 22, 2011 at 11:27 AM

    a most wonderful journey to behold and touch the work of his hands.... on earth and in heaven...

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  27. Chris G.February 22, 2011 at 8:58 PM

    In spite of conventional wisdom/thought, the top's not always the best place to be...beautiful journey you've led us on here, touching on the elevation of man in his connection to others. Never lose your head - an important lesson...

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  28. KavitaFebruary 22, 2011 at 11:53 PM

    BEAUTIFUL!!! Really, all that glitters is not necessarily golden :) You said this perfectly thru' this poem, Ramesh...
    It is golden when enjoyed with others... Alone, everything gets dull after a while..
    I am sure many of can relate to this feeling...
    Very well put, my friend.. Kudos!
    I hope you enjoy the brilliance of the moon and the twinkling of the stars with the ones with you love...

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  29. Brian MillerFebruary 23, 2011 at 5:55 AM

    smiles. nice wisdom in this...being seen is truly a need though the top is not always the best place to find it...

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  30. trishaFebruary 25, 2011 at 5:48 AM

    a splendid poem ramesh, full of wisdom, sweetness and truth.

    whats the use of flying if i cant touch the ground, build my nest?

    trisha

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