Wednesday, August 18, 2010

Haiku for 3WW, Haiku Heights, OSI


Oh, HAIKUs! I have got fascinated by them in just about a week - before that we were strangers - and perhaps they with me....now they would keep on knocking to enter my mind and get spread on the page.. so spilling one here. Hope you will like ...

3WW : Phase, Stumble, Grimace Haiku Heights: Strange OSI:Beginning


Words stumbled
Beginning of a strange phase
Creativity grimaced..

Edited version to make it a true haiku hopefully... would love to know from you..


A sad new phase begins
Creativty grimaces
Strange, words stumble




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14 comments:

  1. Thom GabrukiewiczAugust 18, 2010 at 11:34 AM

    so simple, but so good.

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  2. anthonynorthAugust 18, 2010 at 2:13 PM

    I think every poet has moments like this. Nicely said.

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  3. AngelAugust 18, 2010 at 3:41 PM

    I like the poem but wanted to let you know, that from what I've read and heard, a true Haiku has 5 syllables, 7 syllables and then 5 again in the last line. Just so you know.

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  4. SandyCarlsonAugust 18, 2010 at 7:57 PM

    Stumbling can cause a lot of pain.

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  5. AnonymousAugust 18, 2010 at 8:44 PM

    I know the feeling. I like how you used the words to convey this oh so writerly truth.

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  6. DreamerAugust 18, 2010 at 9:46 PM

    Saying so much with so few words. Nice!

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  7. Ramesh SoodAugust 18, 2010 at 11:46 PM

    Thanks everyone for reaching here and encouraging me..

    @Yes true haiku is what you say.. and taking it in right spirit I have tried that too.. But you will agree less than total 17 syllables not necessarily in the propotion is an acceptable form.. I agree more than 17 syllables is not an hiaku..sorry missed it in original thought.. wrongly calculated for the word 'Creativity'..

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  8. Magical Mystical TeacherAugust 19, 2010 at 4:35 AM

    Counting syllables—
    if you have the right number,
    do you have haiku?

    Or do haiku gods
    take you by surprise, choke you,
    and leave you gasping?

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  9. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallAugust 19, 2010 at 6:57 AM

    great job!

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  10. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallAugust 19, 2010 at 6:57 AM

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/08/19/haiku-struggle-plus-belated-birthdays-awards/

    three awards for you.
    help us visit 4 friends who have been celebrating birthdays ..

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  11. Vinay Leo R.August 19, 2010 at 11:30 PM

    We at Haiku Heights accept modern haikus too, where there is total 17 syllables or less.

    The conflict in the number of syllables is usually because the traditional Haiku originated in Japan, and the 5-7-5 form is taken for the Japanese syllables or On as they are called.

    Haiku in English has 3 lines from 10 up to 17 syllables, using a kire(cutting mark like punctuation) and a kigo(seasonal word, optional). The kire splits the haiku to show two distinct ideas, but related ones. :) A haiku desires to Show a concept rather than Tell it :D

    This is how I understand it, Rameshji.

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  12. Ramesh SoodAugust 20, 2010 at 12:07 AM

    Thanks Leo, I am sure you found them Haikus..

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  13. BeyondAugust 20, 2010 at 7:18 AM

    woops that's a tough one to understand but finally I think I got it 'strange words stumble' :)

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  14. AnonymousAugust 21, 2010 at 2:38 AM

    Strictly speaking a haiku - whether or not it adheres to the classic 5-7-5 syllables, which doesn't always work in a stressed language such as English - is about nature, and if the subject is otherwise, it becomes a senryu. But hey, who's counting! I love your positive attitude to life, Ramesh.

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