First an attempt for Haiku for Haiku Heights.. (Prompt: Field)
(Thanks to Leo for guidance.. Edited what I had put earlier for Haiku)
(Thanks to Leo for guidance.. Edited what I had put earlier for Haiku)
Thanks! Leo
Well, here's my new take for Haiku:
Colourful fields
Flowers chase butterflies
Trees around laugh
Well, here's my new take for Haiku:
Colourful fields
Flowers chase butterflies
Trees around laugh
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And now here's an attempt to write on combined prompts of OSI and 3WW
Connoisseur, Coccon, joke, remedy, leverage, predict, Drink, Feeble..
Birth of a New Star
How could he be refused
Even if the painting appeared
A big joke on the sensibilities of art
There was no remedy
Had to be exhibited in the Gallery
Among the contemporaries
For the artist had the leverage
Being son of a famous connoisseur
And who could predict
The painting may fetch good reward
Oh, don’t tell me that
You would be surprised seeing
The headline on the relevant page
Screaming,"Birth of a New Star"
Isn't it how the world moves
And drunk with success,
Swollen heads make
Feeble claims of the authenticity
Ah! Why did I come out of my Cocoon?
And I know the answer
In spite of all this
World is so very beautiful..
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Well done. Leaverage works in a subjective field like arts. Yes, no matter what the world is beautiful.
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I appreciate how you took the other poems from the other prompts and melded them into such a grand, universal melody.
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haha :) firstly, the melody of the combined prompts was very nice Rameshji.. wonderful take..
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Haiku Heights.. :)
coming to your tercet, well, its not a haiku i think, coz its exceeding 17 syllables in three lines :) but its a nice thought that is expressed.. my guidance? :-o m still novice at haiku i feel, but will pass on what I do know...
a haiku is of 3 lines, if possible, u can relate it to nature.. the three lines have total of 17 syllables or lesser(syllable being pronunciation sounds). in ur name, there are 2 syllables, seeing that its pronounced as Ram-esh.. the only other rule I know of is that -ing verbs aren't allowed. :)
if u r having difficulty in the syllables, u can visit http://www.thefreedictionary.com where the word u search will be displayed, split in syllables :)
good one!
ReplyDelete"Flowers chase butterflies " - I like that idea
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good job.. and thanks for visiting my blog..
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perfecto.. that is one awesome haiku.. like that.. simplicity can be very beautiful Rameshji.. u showed it :)
ReplyDeleteWow, two 3WW posts. I liked your poetry take on a new star.
ReplyDeleteloved the haiku!
ReplyDeleteI am a part of this world and in spite of all what is right and wrong here I love it because it is my world, my adobe.. a very good haiku(i first searched what haiku meant :) )
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