Wednesday, September 1, 2010
3WW Prompts: Break, Negative, Surface
A heart breaks, and
Fissures simmer below surface
Developing negatives...
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A little one holding vase
In tiny hands, moves confidently
Ah, mother shouts, " Don't, it will break."
And the time trembles,
Negativity overpowers positivity
Vase slips and shattered
Pieces of confidence lie
Scattered on mind's fragile surface..
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Here's adding another one:
Don't bring negatives
To the surface, why break
Sculpted myths..
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I particularly related to the first three lines. So evocative, nicely done.
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Negativity changes things and makes the inevitable.
ReplyDeleteNice one.
both are good reads, but for different reasons. No favorites here, I like them equally.
ReplyDeleteBoth of them are beautifully done. Kudos.
ReplyDeletenice one..!!
ReplyDelete"A heart breaks, and
ReplyDeleteFissures simmer below surface
Developing negatives.." So true...
And as a child I know what builds up in mind the fear of not being reckless grips the mind and caution steps in.
Good reads, both. Isn't it funny, whenever someone tells you not to drop something it is more than likely that you will.
ReplyDeleteAmazing poems, all three. I especially like the last one! Sculpted myths is such nice wordplay.
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Very well said.
Don't bring negatives
ReplyDeleteTo the surface, why break
Sculpted myths.......
Am standing and clapping for this line......
Fantabolous.... loved it
Amazing abstractness ...
It conveyed loads of philosophy