Thursday, May 24, 2012

He Glows..


Written for Rebecca's Haiku My Heart...



Also for Leo's Haiku Heights : Joy




My humble attempt in telling a haiku story in
5-7-5, 3-5-3, 2-3-2, 1-2-1
let me know if I have succeeded..


He Glows..


Musical footfalls;
she sits with her eyes closed
in the  jogging park.

*

Greener grass
shines under the sun;
he walks in..

*

Sunrays
wash her face
he glows..


*

Love;
eyes spill
Joy

RS:)

Thanks
to my friend from Switzerland
Claude LOPEZ-GINISTY
for translating in French..

Bruits de pas musicaux;
elle est assise, les yeux fermés
dans le parc de jogging.

*
L'herbe plus verte
brille sous le soleil;
il entre..

*
Les rayons du soleil
lavent son visage
il s'enflamme..

*
L'amour;
Les yeux répandent
la joie

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30 comments:

  1. anthonynorthMay 25, 2012 at 10:15 AM

    And glowing works.

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  2. carol l mckennaMay 25, 2012 at 2:11 PM

    magical haiku ~ ^_^

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  3. anupamaMay 25, 2012 at 8:21 PM

    Pyara Dost,
    Suprabhatham!
    The sunshine and the glowing dewdrops on the grass,
    The twinkle in her eys,
    The love in his eyes,
    Make the moments really wonderful!

    Well writte, dost !Nice thoughts!
    Sasneham,
    Anu

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  4. PranitaMay 25, 2012 at 10:25 PM

    A beautiful story weaved... lovely image! :)
    Do and think not.. Think, then do!

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  5. Diana TenevaMay 25, 2012 at 10:34 PM

    Well written! I love the last one - eyes spill joy!!!

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  6. AnonymousMay 25, 2012 at 10:48 PM

    It's a very sweet love story, Ramesh!

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  7. vivinfranceMay 25, 2012 at 11:01 PM

    This is a gorgeous way of telling the old 'boy meets girl' story in haiku.

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  8. Claude LOPEZ-GINISTYMay 25, 2012 at 11:53 PM

    Great!



    Bruits de pas musicaux;
    elle est assise, les yeux fermés
    dans le parc de jogging.

    *

    L'herbe plus verte
    brille sous le soleil;
    il entre..

    *

    Les rayons du soleil
    lavent son visage
    il s'enflamme..


    *

    L'amour;
    Les yeux répandent
    la joie

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  9. Rashmirekha MannaMay 26, 2012 at 3:15 AM

    The visualization was a delight...

    What magical golden threads weaved into this beautiful silken fabric that smells of Love.

    Thank you sir.

    Regards
    RM

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  10. GraceMay 26, 2012 at 3:28 AM

    A sweet love story ~ Joyful words ~

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  11. NAWALMay 26, 2012 at 6:11 AM

    Lovely take over the prompt and beautifully described :)

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  12. kaykualaMay 26, 2012 at 6:14 AM

    That's a real challenge, Ramesh! You did it! Great!

    Hank

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  13. Tarun MazumdarMay 26, 2012 at 7:38 AM

    Oh! Ramesh ji you made my day.... i feel so good after reading this set! Thank you so much

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  14. HazelMay 26, 2012 at 7:56 AM

    Behold he gloweth! This feels so spiritual and physical to me. Great haiku.

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  15. Vinay Leo R.May 26, 2012 at 7:59 AM

    Oh the eyes spill joy for sure, Rameshji! Wonderful! :)

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  16. Magical Mystical TeacherMay 26, 2012 at 9:48 AM

    Electricity of love in the air!

    Cultivating Joy

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  17. Maude LynnMay 26, 2012 at 9:49 AM

    Lovely!

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  18. Jaideep RaoMay 26, 2012 at 10:18 AM

    What can I say, you have just set a example for all of us at HH!, thank you sir!

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  19. peggy gattoMay 26, 2012 at 10:47 AM

    Now you have gone and done it!!!!!!
    Really a joy!

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  20. AnonymousMay 26, 2012 at 11:17 AM

    Lovely story -- you introduce me to another form -- thank you, Ramesh!! Happy weekend. Joyous Heart

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  21. SwetaMay 26, 2012 at 2:16 PM

    Sunrays wash her face !! Loved this one . Such a beautiful expression :-)

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  22. ireneMay 26, 2012 at 4:07 PM

    lovely images that create a whole scene. definitely a success.

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  23. rebeccaMay 26, 2012 at 5:09 PM

    every love filled word worth waiting for! thank you ramesh for the beauty of this fills me each time i read your haiku, over and over.

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  24. zongrikMay 26, 2012 at 5:14 PM

    i like how you structured the smaller and smaller haiku...

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  25. Sri ValliMay 27, 2012 at 2:00 AM

    Beautiful set.....I loved the smallest haiku in the set....tiny yet has powerful meaning!

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  26. ChèvrefeuilleMay 27, 2012 at 2:41 AM

    Awesome set of haiku Ramesh. Great form, loved reading it. I think I am gonna try this form also :-)

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  27. Saru SinghalMay 28, 2012 at 8:08 AM

    Beautiful Sir, sun rays washing her skin was absolute delight. I am little occupied these days, so I am missing reading all my favorite blogs. Sorry for that and big thank you for writing this piece.

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  28. AnonymousMay 29, 2012 at 8:13 AM

    Hello Sir I am new to Haiku and after reading this one I am left in a trance and completely mesmerized...such beautiful writing,just adored it! Thank you! :)

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  29. N.S.KirtiJune 1, 2012 at 7:12 AM

    "love:eyes spill joy"
    eyes SPILLING joy touched my heart bang on.
    such a lovely haiku Ramesh Ji :)

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  30. Anu ~*~June 1, 2012 at 8:02 AM

    Awesome haiku sir ...
    l liked it ..
    best joy ever

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