Wednesday, December 15, 2010

ENLIGHTENED SOUL.....3WW

Written for 3WW...prompts: Utter, Lean, Dabble
And for Poetry Potluck..
And my 3rd entry for OSI : WIN
Poem in the form of a series of Haikus.... for Haiku My Heart

Enlightened Soul


Utter devotion
Dabbles in scriptures
Leans on faith

Leans on faith
Always waits to make efforts
Fruits keep eluding

Fruits keep eluding
Needs remain unfulfilled
Faith gets shaken

Faith gets shaken
Dabbles in unscrupulous
Leans on corrupt

Leans on corrupt
Falls in own eyes, hurt pride
Returns to faith

Returns to faith
New resolve makes to act
Fruits fall in lap

Fruits fall in lap
Starts sharing, receives more
Enlightened soul

Enlightened soul
Dabbles utterly in God’s work
Leans on nothing

Leans on nothing
Ah, it’s light all around
Love flows, wins..

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21 comments:

  1. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallDecember 15, 2010 at 8:28 AM

    You are so very creative and supportive.
    Thanks for sharing your work with potluck...

    A++

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  2. gautami tripathyDecember 15, 2010 at 8:47 AM

    All so good...

    dead man and his shoe painting

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  3. NankaDecember 15, 2010 at 9:07 AM

    That was done so skilfully and a very creative imagination.

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  5. AnonymousDecember 15, 2010 at 10:04 AM

    So much wisdom in these lines!
    Always a pleasure to be here.
    -Gio

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  6. Anya PadyamDecember 15, 2010 at 11:47 AM

    That was beautiful

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  7. Thom GabrukiewiczDecember 15, 2010 at 1:57 PM

    you've woven such a wonderful poem here. Thanks for sharing, as always.

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  8. AngelDecember 15, 2010 at 2:23 PM

    Very creative.

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  9. UnknownDecember 15, 2010 at 4:00 PM

    Quite a journey you took us on. I like your use of hooks to move the reader on.

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  10. SandyCarlsonDecember 15, 2010 at 6:30 PM

    Yes, oh, yes!

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  11. Lost in thoughtsDecember 15, 2010 at 10:16 PM

    Nice poetry...Wonderfully woven.

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  12. BeyondDecember 16, 2010 at 1:49 AM

    beautiful and true.. but sometimes I just hang on to faith and keep waiting for the time till the dabbling around is over

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  13. eyeographyDecember 16, 2010 at 2:09 AM

    Wow...
    Very powerful...
    I love the way you wrote all the haikus..
    amazing :)

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  14. Jae RoseDecember 16, 2010 at 4:08 AM

    I love the new direction in your writing..you played so effortlessly with the words and really took us on a journey with your ideas..thank you for providing more good things..Jae

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  15. Annie JeffriesDecember 17, 2010 at 12:48 AM

    This is so powerful. The structure gives stability to your tribute to life that is often unstable.

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  16. Lalita SinghDecember 17, 2010 at 1:08 AM

    Excellent as always! Nicely Done!!

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  17. rebeccaDecember 17, 2010 at 5:37 AM

    good morning ramesh!
    this is an epic "life" journey. one whose central struggle for enlightment is resolved beautifully here..

    Enlightened soul
    Dabbles utterly in God’s work
    Leans on nothing

    you have a clever and perceptive mind that seems to bloom under the constraints of haiku!

    thank you for your gems and enthusiastic presence here.

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  18. AnonymousDecember 17, 2010 at 5:59 AM

    Interesting progression.

    All the best, Boonie

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  19. MeriDecember 17, 2010 at 9:27 AM

    I second what Rebecca said. I loved anticipating each new haiku, waiting to see how it would build on the previous haiku "stanza." Very clever use of words.

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  20. Ramesh SoodDecember 18, 2010 at 1:28 AM

    Thank a lot every oen visiting this page.. I am delighted.. it encourages.. thanks!

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  21. turquoise croDecember 19, 2010 at 3:01 PM

    LOVE, LOVE, LOVE, all we need is LOVE!!!

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