Wednesday, December 15, 2010

ENLIGHTENED SOUL.....3WW

Written for 3WW...prompts: Utter, Lean, Dabble
And for Poetry Potluck..
And my 3rd entry for OSI : WIN
Poem in the form of a series of Haikus.... for Haiku My Heart

Enlightened Soul


Utter devotion
Dabbles in scriptures
Leans on faith

Leans on faith
Always waits to make efforts
Fruits keep eluding

Fruits keep eluding
Needs remain unfulfilled
Faith gets shaken

Faith gets shaken
Dabbles in unscrupulous
Leans on corrupt

Leans on corrupt
Falls in own eyes, hurt pride
Returns to faith

Returns to faith
New resolve makes to act
Fruits fall in lap

Fruits fall in lap
Starts sharing, receives more
Enlightened soul

Enlightened soul
Dabbles utterly in God’s work
Leans on nothing


Leans on nothing
Ah, it’s light all around
Love flows, wins..

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21 comments:

  1. You are so very creative and supportive.
    Thanks for sharing your work with potluck...

    A++

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  2. That was done so skilfully and a very creative imagination.

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  4. So much wisdom in these lines!
    Always a pleasure to be here.
    -Gio

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  5. you've woven such a wonderful poem here. Thanks for sharing, as always.

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  6. Quite a journey you took us on. I like your use of hooks to move the reader on.

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  7. beautiful and true.. but sometimes I just hang on to faith and keep waiting for the time till the dabbling around is over

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  8. Wow...
    Very powerful...
    I love the way you wrote all the haikus..
    amazing :)

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  9. I love the new direction in your writing..you played so effortlessly with the words and really took us on a journey with your ideas..thank you for providing more good things..Jae

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  10. This is so powerful. The structure gives stability to your tribute to life that is often unstable.

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  11. good morning ramesh!
    this is an epic "life" journey. one whose central struggle for enlightment is resolved beautifully here..

    Enlightened soul
    Dabbles utterly in God’s work
    Leans on nothing

    you have a clever and perceptive mind that seems to bloom under the constraints of haiku!

    thank you for your gems and enthusiastic presence here.

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  12. Interesting progression.

    All the best, Boonie

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  13. I second what Rebecca said. I loved anticipating each new haiku, waiting to see how it would build on the previous haiku "stanza." Very clever use of words.

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  15. LOVE, LOVE, LOVE, all we need is LOVE!!!

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