Written for OSI: Carnival and Haiku Heights: Insomnia
and also shared with Haiku My Heart
Carnival of stars
I and Moon watch , at the end
Day comes dancing..
FOR OSI:
Carnival of Thoughts
Colours rain
Music floats, smiles bloom and
I watch from sidelines
I watch from sidelines
As the procession moves on
Dancing trees flank
Dancing trees flank
Clouds from above too cheer
Birds join carnival
Birds join carnival
Fluttering wings Of joy,
Flowers are happy
Flowers are happy
As butterflies seek to catch
Notes of music
Notes of music
Fingers move on strings, Tap
Keys in harmony
Keys in harmony
Procession picks up pace
I‘m pushed aside
I‘m pushed aside
Eyes shut themselves, I watch
Carnival of thoughts
Carnival of thoughts
No more on sidelines
I become music
I become music
My universe dances in verse
Hold me, God!
Hold me, God!
I bathe in ecstasy
Ah! Colours rain..
Hope you enjoyed the carnival as much as I did.. thanks for being here..
Go ahead! Don't you hold!
ReplyDeleteVery nice Ramesh, deep and intuitive, spiritual and powerful. Great work!
ReplyDeleteLike how each haiku picked up the thread of the one before! Keeps the rhythm flowing! Delightful!
ReplyDeletesuperlative...i loved the natural and logical progression of thoughts...yet magical and disjointed!
ReplyDeleteExcellent words, as well as technically good.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful string of Haiku's each creating a beautiful imagery and one better than the other.
ReplyDeleteReally a technicolor movie seen in ecstasy.
Pyaara Dost,
ReplyDeleteGood Evening!
I live in a state where Carnival is one of the imporatnt cultural festivals!
Dost,I thoroughly enjoyed the carnival of thoughts.Let them fly high reaching each and every one speading joy and peace.
Wishing you a beautiful evening,
Sasneham,
Anu
Now this is a wonderful carnival! I loved both your poem and your haiku...beautifully expressed, as always.
ReplyDeleteGlad to be a part of this carnival Rameshji!! Loved how you interconnected the Haikus one after the other.
ReplyDeleteCarnival, great Haikus.. Nicely done Rameshji...
ReplyDeleteSomeone is Special
The lines continue to 'ring' in the ear. A joy for the sense of sound, and sight. Please have a good start into the new week.
ReplyDeletedaily athens
I really enjoyed your images.
ReplyDeletewhat an ecstasy...brilliant :)
ReplyDeleteyou are really good in this ramesh! nice.. thank you for sharing! here's my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/19/my-whole-world/
ReplyDeleteThis went to an excellent place. I was reminded of the Sufi whirling dirvish whose very act of dance is a devotion to G-d.
ReplyDeleteI am thankful to all the friends for visiting my Carnival of Thoughts....your blessings have added to my happiness..
ReplyDeleteI love the way you always portray nature in such details in your poetry 1 It almost comes alive in your words :)
ReplyDeleteThe haiku was fun to read and your poem had an almost musical quality to it. I especially loved the line, "Flowers are happy." Made me happy to visit here. :)
ReplyDeleteYour haikus feed into each other very well I think, one building on the ones before. The rhythm too, it kept getting stronger. I'm glad I stopped by from the OSI roundup and got to read this.
ReplyDeleteA veritable carnival of haikus! I like the way you have presented them. :) Well done.
ReplyDeleteHaiku Master..
ReplyDeleteBeuatiful. Just lovely Ramesh.
ReplyDeleteThat is so beautiful and inspirational, especially on this rainy day!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful flow as you led us on a spiritual journey to the arms of God. Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteYou have woven a very clever chain of thought, Ramesh. Good work! :)
ReplyDelete..
At the carnival—
ReplyDeletecolors and dancing and cheer—
I’m glad I came here!
Carnival
And what a carnival Ramesh!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful Ramesh. I loved the carnival! :)
ReplyDeleteCheers
Padmavani
www.padmavani.blogspot.com
love the linking verse to verse..it creates flow and also creates repitition of key lines...nice one shot
ReplyDeleteMY GOSH!!! I certainly enjoyed this carnival of thoughts, Ramesh... this was fascinating! Loved the ride... the pace of the poem was simply awesome! Your words were so full of zest and vigor... bursting with enthusiasm... wow! It was a delight!!!
ReplyDeleteAnd I totally loved the form/structure of the poem.. the repetitions sure had their effect!!
What a flight if mind.... :)
ReplyDeletePaintbrush in the hands of heart, winged heart, dreamy heart, fighter heart, luminescent heart
I love the flow and journey through the universe ... delightful read with a great rhythm. I must remember where I read about starting the next stanza with the last line of the previous ... it has a ripple effect. Starting small and growing - taking the reader along a magical ride. Thank you for sharing and pointing this particular piece out to me. Namaste ~~ becca
ReplyDelete"carnival of thoughts" :such a beautiful expression! i could feel myself losing myself to the tune of your carnival Rameshji..grt job!!
ReplyDeleteWe have the Universe within us....let us Live Inside Our Own SELF.
ReplyDeleteA friend Surindernath of blog Mr. Moonlight Flipp Flopp
ReplyDeletewith the link http://snatsleepwalkers.wordpress.com/ asked me to put this comment here..
"As a student of Literature for the last 30 + years, I rate this among the best creative work by Indian poets. What a combination of Cosmic Ecstasy and Romanticism."
I feel myself so grateful for this..I just wrote it as it came.. a chain in hiku format..didn't know it would get such a comment... RS:)
hi Ramesh, just making your invite!
ReplyDeletethis carnival of haiku reaches a divine crescendo - my congratulations on this fine work