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Thursday, January 6, 2011
Hi....Haikus for HMH
Written for Haiku My Heart : January 07,2010 Friday
Here's an attempt to keep the syllables less than seventeen..
I like the second one the best. It has a beautiful sentiment. I am not sure if these are haikus since they are define by the number of syllables, but they are surely beautiful and very well done. I like the topics of both and I think that they are deeply expressive. Noelle
One of the things I'm still learning about haiku is to not worry about counting syllables. I'm glad to see someone else learning that lesson too! (Brevity is the soul of haiku.)
I like the second one the best. It has a beautiful sentiment. I am not sure if these are haikus since they are define by the number of syllables, but they are surely beautiful and very well done. I like the topics of both and I think that they are deeply expressive.
ReplyDeleteNoelle
The first one sounds like the beginning of a short story...I really like it.
ReplyDeletethe lines of old age ......
ReplyDeleteWonderful!!! Cathy
ReplyDeleteLike Noelle, I really like the second one a lot.
ReplyDeletePeace.
The second one speaks to every mother.
ReplyDeleteOne of the things I'm still learning about haiku is to not worry about counting syllables. I'm glad to see someone else learning that lesson too! (Brevity is the soul of haiku.)
ReplyDeleteFriends Haiku My Heart
I'm also a mother
ReplyDeleteand your words are so the truth
:-)
different sentiments but both are well crafted !
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