Thursday, January 6, 2011

Hi....Haikus for HMH

Written for Haiku My Heart : January 07,2010 Friday

Here's an attempt to keep the syllables less than seventeen..


Deep dark
Lines on face,
Time speaks..



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First step
Footprint lives In
Mother’s heart



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9 comments:

  1. I like the second one the best. It has a beautiful sentiment. I am not sure if these are haikus since they are define by the number of syllables, but they are surely beautiful and very well done. I like the topics of both and I think that they are deeply expressive.
    Noelle

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  2. The first one sounds like the beginning of a short story...I really like it.

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  3. Like Noelle, I really like the second one a lot.

    Peace.

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  4. The second one speaks to every mother.

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  5. One of the things I'm still learning about haiku is to not worry about counting syllables. I'm glad to see someone else learning that lesson too! (Brevity is the soul of haiku.)


    Friends Haiku My Heart

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  6. I'm also a mother
    and your words are so the truth
    :-)

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  7. different sentiments but both are well crafted !

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