Wednesday, May 11, 2011

Moon Brandishes Smiles

Written for 3WW.... Brandish, Manage, Forbid


Moon Brandishes Smiles


Moon brandishes smiles
Sun forbids Earth and commands,
“Manage your feelings”.

Mesmerized Earth
Obeys and maintains distance
Holds temptations well…

A happy Sun gives
All the energy and light
Yet Moon keeps trying..

And the world goes on
Oblivious to the game
Between all the three …




By ...RS : )











26 comments:

  1. This poem is a eight and true metaphor for the way society functions in general. Nice job.
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/11/words-daggers-and-swords-petite/

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  2. Kim beat me to it - just fantastic metaphors..I would like to be the moon but guess I'm mostly earth..maybe the trick is balancing a little of each inside..beautiful, worldly piece Ramesh..Jae

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  3. But the earth does drape half of herself in grey with sparkling, gems of the ice caps, and silver ribbon laces of rivers that reflect the moon's glowing, serene emotions. While she shows the other smiling half of her face to the sun so that she can steal those few moments of romance with the moon, while the sun remains oblivious



    What you have written is a beautiful metaphor sir. Most romantic relations are the ones the world remains oblivious to.
    Thanks for the beautiful words...

    Regards


    P.S. Something positive again sir

    http://heartspeakrm.blogspot.com/2011/05/blog-post_11.html

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  4. Yes, this is lovely, as if all three orbs were quarrelsome siblings. Or perhaps it's mother sun and her two rambunctious offspring. Really lovely piece.

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  5. This is devastatingly beautiful.

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  6. all those great metaphors what awonderful poem about society.

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  7. I love the bit about the happy sun!!

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  8. Your imagination is wonderful, the Sun commanding, the Earth obeying and he Moon trying :)

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  9. Can you be down to earth, and ethereal at the same time? I think you have just done it.
    Lovely!

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  10. My 51st Post :) :) It's new.. written today

    http://heartspeakrm.blogspot.com/2011/05/what-heck-whos-john-galt.html

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  11. Hi RS, looks like blogger is finally up again. So I can say I enjoyed your words today. Have a great week.
    E :)

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  12. I like this, it is playful.

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  13. I've heard of brandishing swords and guns, but never smiles. Your language disarms me! :-)

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  14. delightful in a very ramesh way!
    great us of challenge words!!!

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  15. what wonderful imagery. this is my favorite so far.beautiful.

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  16. Your stanzas of haiku fascinate me. A lot to think about and feel about.

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  17. this is how i start my day.
    Here.


    knowing i will find a thought
    to occupy my head
    whilst my hands weed
    the
    morning garden...

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  18. I'm just taking all this in, listening to your voice, listening to the comments made, and enjoying all of it.RM and MMT gave lovely comments.
    Rosie

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  19. the world oblivious to the game of all three.....so sweet :)

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  20. sir i would like you to visit my space too @

    http://bluestocking-bird.blogspot.com/

    regards

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  21. What wonderful imagery, wrapped up so beautifully! Well done Ramesh!

    Motivational Poems

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  22. Fantastic!! I love how you depicted this cosmic game here, Rameshji.. it's so totally cool... and wonderful! Great imagery!

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