Written for
Prompt: Lock
Have tried to use lock with
various meanings..
Prompt: Fickle
Footprints of Childhood
In the depths of heart
are locked her happy dreams;
footprints of childhood
*
A swish of her hand
moves locks away from her eyes;
gesture beckons him
*
fickle mind,
he still shuns an eye-lock;
she wonders
*
Her melted feelings
want to reach up to him, oh;
will lock rise the flow
*
Ah, this game of pull;
God unlock the mystery
that controls the hearts..
RS:)
Here's the happy Gift of translation
in French from my friend
Claude LOPEZ-GINISTY
Dans les profondeurs du cœur
sont enfermés ses rêves heureux;
empreintes de l'enfance
*
Un geste de sa main
repousse une boucle de ses yeux;
ce geste l'attire lui
*
esprit capricieux,
il méprise un regard appuyé;
elle se pose des questions
*
Ses sentiments attendris
veulent l'atteindre lui, oh;
l'écluse fera-t-elle s'élever le flux
*
Ah, ce jeu d'attirance;
Dieu déverrouille le mystère
qui contrôle les cœurs ..
Also Shared with :
Rebecca's Haiku My Heart
Ahhhhh
ReplyDeletea love story.
lovely romantic haiku ~ 'let go' ~ it will all play itself out ~ ^_^
ReplyDeleteBeautiful Fantastic Haiku :)
ReplyDeletea great romantic love story Rameshji..
ReplyDeleteI love the different meanings of the word Lock that you have used, RSji :) but from the set, I'd take the first to be the best... it is something even I can relate to, my happiest dreams being in childhood. The "her" isn't even required I think :)
ReplyDeleteRS your timestamp has gone to Eastern Standard Time suddenly :)
DeleteMy settings continue to be GMT pacific time..
DeleteAn accomplished set, as ever. I didn't understand number 4 - are you referring to a canal lock?
ReplyDeleteexquisite....a mystical story... :)
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ReplyDeleteA delightful read of the various meanings of locks in your senryu.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, God unlock the beautiful mystery!
ReplyDeleteThe third haiku is mysterious and full of "double entendre" ...
ReplyDeleteDans les profondeurs du cœur
sont enfermés ses rêves heureux;
empreintes de l'enfance
*
Un geste de sa main
repousse une boucle de ses yeux;
ce geste l'attire lui
*
esprit capricieux,
il méprise un regard appuyé;
elle se pose des questions
*
Ses sentiments attendris
veulent l'atteindre lui, oh;
l'écluse fera-t-elle s'élever le flux
*
Ah, ce jeu d'attirance;
Dieu déverrouille le mystère
qui contrôle les cœurs ..
LAst haiku... a thing of beauty really! Loved each one.. the questions and traits of the heart!!!
ReplyDeleteWhen waves transport to the new shore
I see you have unlocked your mind for this exercise. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteMore Peace
Very nice set ~ I like the various meaning of lock ~
ReplyDeleteAwesome set!!...I loved 1st 3rd and last a lot!!
ReplyDeleteI like the first one best. How wonderful to have happy memories of childhood.
ReplyDeleteAmen to all of your hailkus, Ramesh. Story of life and love.
ReplyDeleteJust beautiful sir!
ReplyDeleteExcellent set!
ReplyDeletethe first one is most dear to me..i think I will treasure it:)
ReplyDeleteGreat collection as always.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem sir ...
ReplyDeleteLovely set of Haiku Sir. Mysterious are the ways of a heart :)
ReplyDeleteAll these locks... I think your lovely haiku also hold many keys! I love that line, "footprints of a child." and also seeing your words in french, is a gift as well! Thank you Ramesh!
ReplyDeleteRamesh, my friend, it is clear that what you are trying to write is not haiku as I understand it. That doesn't mean there is anything wrong with it. It only means that I can't help you. Good luck with it.
ReplyDeleteThe footprints of childhood are indelible!!
ReplyDeleteFlaming Locks
Beautiful tale you have written!!
ReplyDelete"Her melted feelings want to reach up to him",
ReplyDeletegrasps so emotionally and runs in my mind :) wow sir.. wonderful set of haiku :)
Cute one! :)
ReplyDeleteEspecially love the second one. :)