Friday, August 2, 2013

She Sits on a Rock..


Written for
Leo's Haiku Heights
Prompt: Beach..


After quite some time I come out with my original style of creating a cascade of haiku and I have tried that each one can stand alone too..

Do let me know if I have succeeded..

She Sits on a Rock

She sits on a rock,
grains of sand shine on her feet;
vanishing footprints…

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Vanishing footprints;
rising waves hug the beach,
sun sinks silently;

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Sun sinks silently;
ochre sky spills colours
on the golden beach

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On the golden beach
I hear soft tinkling sound;
musical anklet

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Musical anklet;
Moving her feet in rhythm
She sits on a rock…


RS:)
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16 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 2, 2013 at 12:18 PM

    Thats really nice...

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  2. LollyAugust 2, 2013 at 1:45 PM

    very peaceful. very nice. I believe they can stand out on their own. Well done.

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  3. ReshmaAugust 2, 2013 at 6:18 PM

    Ah I can hear the tinkling anklets. Beautiful cascade RS:)

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  4. kalpana solsiAugust 2, 2013 at 10:41 PM

    You started with,' She sits on a rock' and ended with , she sits on a rock' with cascading effect and I can see the fine sand shine at her feet and hear the musical tinkle as she moves her feet.just beautiful RS.

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  5. SpadomanAugust 3, 2013 at 2:04 AM

    Any of these could stand completely alone, and with each playing off the other, we are totally drawn into the scene and watching her on the beach. You've done very well.

    Peace

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  6. Sumana RoyAugust 3, 2013 at 5:54 AM


    a musical cascade.

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  7. NankaAugust 3, 2013 at 6:08 AM

    Are you sure she is not a mermaid RS!! This mythological aquatic creature is so associated with the sea!!

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  8. Tarang SinhaAugust 3, 2013 at 8:39 PM

    Lovely set!!:)

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  9. Payal RamsisariaAugust 4, 2013 at 12:43 AM

    Beautifully composed!

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  10. AnonymousAugust 4, 2013 at 2:14 AM

    Yes, you succeeded well! Each is a gem, telling a story.

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  11. Siggi in Downeast MaineAugust 4, 2013 at 8:16 PM

    I like how you do your cascading haiku.
    They do stand alone...but tell a wonderful story together. I find the sound of the bracelet wonderful...
    tinkling is exactly what my ears heard when I read it.
    Peace
    Siggi

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  12. Maggie GraceAugust 4, 2013 at 8:46 PM

    Lovely cascade.

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  13. UnknownAugust 4, 2013 at 8:48 PM

    Rs this Haiku brings harmonious tunes to the fore. Very soft and tender feelings!!

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  14. PanchaliAugust 5, 2013 at 1:09 AM

    Delightful sequence..in the soft air the waves kept breaking:) Lovely!

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  15. AnonymousAugust 5, 2013 at 9:17 AM

    These are lovely Ramesh

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  16. VKvikiAugust 9, 2013 at 1:35 AM

    its calming effects
    leaves me breathless
    in the passing moment

    in the passing moment
    i saw your words
    with its calming effects

    i love the things that you write.. :)

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