Friday, March 9, 2012

I Try Matching the Steps..


It's Friday.... and I write here for
Rebecca's Haiku My Heart..

I Try Matching the Steps..

A pale shadow
of  sun smiles vainly;
layer of clouds..

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  layer of clouds;
 sunflowers reflect  
melancholy..

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melancholy
quietly vanishes;
withering clouds..

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 withering clouds;
sun peeps through and lo,
sunflowers dance..

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Sunflowers dance;
ecstatic, I try
matching the steps..

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Matching the steps
with nature's cool rhythm;
beautiful life

 RS:)

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16 comments:

  1. LibbyMarch 9, 2012 at 3:56 AM

    Wow...this is REALLY good! I have never seen haikus put together this way...each one starts where the last one left off. Very creative and well done. Thanks!

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  2. ChevrefeuilleMarch 9, 2012 at 4:31 AM

    It's so Ramesh this Cascading haiku, lovely read. I love to read your cascading haiku and try it myself of course, but I think that my cascading haiku aren't as good as yours.
    Thank you for sharing this one with us.

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  3. MaritMarch 9, 2012 at 4:58 AM

    It's always a pleasure to visit you... this week even more. Your haiku are stunning... you've outdone yourself my friend, beautiful!

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  4. carol l mckennaMarch 9, 2012 at 5:05 AM

    Wonderful ~ Ramesh ~ lots of wonderful feelings in the haiku ~ and like the term Chevrefeuille used 'cascading' ~ ' dancing lightly in life' is the visual I get ~ well done ~ thanks, namaste, carol (A Creative Harbor)

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  5. somepinkflowersMarch 9, 2012 at 7:07 AM

    the full moon will watch
    your words carry across miles
    we taste every one

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  6. anthonynorthMarch 9, 2012 at 7:17 AM

    Excellent progression in these.

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  7. AnonymousMarch 9, 2012 at 7:36 AM

    oh!! you are the best...sunshine is my best medicine and dancing sunflowers my muse.

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  8. KarenMarch 9, 2012 at 8:18 AM

    A beautiful sequence!

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  9. LeaMarch 9, 2012 at 8:34 AM

    This is like running through a field of sunflowers! A cascade of words that paint such an amazing picture, a beautiful life indeed! Thank you!

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  10. anupamaMarch 9, 2012 at 8:55 AM

    Pyara Dost,
    Come what may, let the thoughts land up life as beautiful!
    I can see the sunflower fields through your words!
    May your life be as beautiful and bright like the sunflower!
    Best Wishes!
    Sasneham,
    Anu

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  11. ElleceeMarch 9, 2012 at 4:17 PM

    A wonderful flight from melancholy to beautiful. "matching the steps" I enjoyed these very much.

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  12. GraceMarch 9, 2012 at 5:58 PM

    Nice cascading haiku...I do like sunflowers dancing and nature's cool rhythm ~

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  13. Magical Mystical TeacherMarch 9, 2012 at 6:38 PM

    Oh, you graceful dancer you!

    For Sister Moon

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  14. rebeccaMarch 10, 2012 at 6:04 AM

    your haiku are a perfect waltz in the arms of a sunflower!

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  15. HazelMarch 10, 2012 at 7:11 AM

    I love this part so much - 'sun peeps through and lo,
    sunflowers dance...' It's like an opening ballet scene.

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  16. Helen CampbellMarch 10, 2012 at 8:42 AM

    This is wonderful! I especially love the final
    "Matching the steps
    with nature's cool rhythm;
    beautiful life"

    Thanks for sharing!

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