Written for 3WW
Deviant; adjective: Departing from usual or accepted standards, esp. in social or sexual behavior; noun: a deviant person or thing.
Minuscule; adjective: Extremely small, tiny.
Whenever I Want to Think Aloud..
all that is trivial -
like your not appreciating
my new shirt or
for that matter not
commenting on my
new hairstyle
and your not letting me
complete a sentence -
if you want then
you can label me 'deviant'
No, even that won't
be able to make a
minuscule of a difference...
And all that I have
written above is not true
because your opinion
about me still matters
but I want to reach a state
to become, the kind
I have thought aloud here..
Do you know whenever I want
to think aloud, I write...
****
Inspired by haiku by MMT...I add a series..for 3WW..
Shines for the new
planet in the galaxy;
deviant Moon
Deviant Moon
impressed and lost by
trivial hints
Trivial hints
so what if it is just a
minuscule dot...
Deviant; adjective: Departing from usual or accepted standards, esp. in social or sexual behavior; noun: a deviant person or thing.
Minuscule; adjective: Extremely small, tiny.
Trivial; adjective: Of little value or importance; (of a person) concerned only with trifling or unimportant things
Whenever I Want to Think Aloud..
Oh, just because
I don't bother about all that is trivial -
like your not appreciating
my new shirt or
for that matter not
commenting on my
new hairstyle
and your not letting me
complete a sentence -
if you want then
you can label me 'deviant'
No, even that won't
be able to make a
minuscule of a difference...
And all that I have
written above is not true
because your opinion
about me still matters
but I want to reach a state
to become, the kind
I have thought aloud here..
Do you know whenever I want
to think aloud, I write...
****
Inspired by haiku by MMT...I add a series..for 3WW..
Shines for the new
planet in the galaxy;
deviant Moon
Deviant Moon
impressed and lost by
trivial hints
Trivial hints
so what if it is just a
minuscule dot...
RS:)
I like this very much. I especially relate to "whenever I want to think aloud, I write"
ReplyDeleteBoth lovely!
ReplyDeletegreat poetry. I love that line when ever I want to think aloud I write.
ReplyDeleteMinuscule dotted
ReplyDeletedeclarative anything
found before the rest,
the rest of the load:
he shoulders the deviant
forms of the obscure,
knows disappointment
leads without any rancor
to the trivial.
Ramesh, look what you did to me :D
Whenever I want to think aloud I write.
the first poem tears the heart. very good Ramesh.
ReplyDelete-shh (as to the first poem) me too Ramesh..and of course opinions count..but 'saying' it counts more..is 'Moon' another you? Jae
ReplyDeleteBoth so beautifully written, well done Ramesh.
ReplyDeleteAll the best
Marinela
Yeah, this sums it up well - Do you know whenever I want
ReplyDeleteto think aloud, I write...
The first reminded me of Anne Sexton. Especially this part: like your not appreciating
ReplyDeletemy new shirt or
for that matter not
commenting on my
new hairstyle
and your not letting me
complete a sentence -
It just trips off the tongue thinking aloud in my ear. Glad you wrote it down. Nice rhythm and repetition with the next series as well. Glad you were inspired, and glad to see all the inspiration on this page from what you wrote as well. Beautiful comments. Yes, Yes.
I may not appreciate your shirt but I think your new hairstyle is great Ramesh!:)
ReplyDeleteDeviant moon! My favorite. I really like your new way of starting off with the last sentence in each "stanza". Very cool.
ReplyDeleteAt times trivial, miniscule ignorances make the heart so deviant that it takes serious, mammoth decisions and walks on a path deviant from all else and yet so straight n so correct to the heart.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful play of words sir.
And yes the most brilliant of moons have often been found to be falling for and dimmed dark by the most trivial hints of the most miniscule of dots
Regards
RM