Wednesday, August 17, 2011

Moon Smiles Mockingly.

Written for 3WW:

Gasp; verb: Inhale suddenly with the mouth open, out of pain or astonishment; strain to take a deep breath; noun: A convulsive catching of breath.


Mute; adjective: Refraining from speech or temporarily speechless; not expressed in speech; characterized by an absence of sound, quiet; noun: A person without the power of speech; verb: Deaden, muffle or soften the sound of; reduce the strength or intensity of (something).

Viable; adjective: Capable of working successfully, feasible.


First a Haiku, how can I miss it..

Scream? Not viable..
A mute response is not right
I just gasp at him..

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Moon Smiles Mockingly..

Walking on Moon
I gasped for breathe, not
A viable alternative
If one forgets
Oxygen mask back at home
I jumped back in
My Dream, and
Returned to
Imagined reality
Wanted to share
The experience with all
But then someone
Pressed ‘Mute’
Another ‘Paused’
I gasp for breathe
Moon smiles mockingly..

By : RS : )


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16 comments:

  1. Jae RoseAugust 17, 2011 at 4:59 AM

    I like that a gasp is somewhere between being mute and screaming..a kind of dignified middle ground..who is this moon..I don't like that s/he is pulling you from dreams..Jae

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  2. DeborahAugust 17, 2011 at 6:05 AM

    Delightful to read ... I loved it!

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  3. ScribblerAugust 17, 2011 at 7:13 AM

    Both have a sense of mystery and a hidden backstory...very beautiful, I loved them both.

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  4. Nisha JosephAugust 17, 2011 at 8:36 AM

    Imagined reality
    Wanted to share
    The experience with all
    But then someone
    Pressed ‘Mute’
    Another ‘Paused’....

    Nice lines ji, like it a lot

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  5. Sheilagh LeeAugust 17, 2011 at 8:39 AM

    Both of these excellent,i truly enjoyed them.

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  6. DaydreamertooAugust 17, 2011 at 8:50 AM

    What a vivid dream, to be walking on the moon and forget your oxygen mask. LOL
    Lovely use of the prompt!

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  7. ShaunaAugust 17, 2011 at 4:04 PM

    the first poem is my favorite,
    a dangerous quality.

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  8. christopherAugust 17, 2011 at 4:22 PM

    I like the fun of the second. I believe there is a place for humor in poetry and that humor does not reduce a good poem to something less.

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  9. AnonymousAugust 17, 2011 at 6:02 PM

    Both a pleasure to read.
    I adore the haiku.

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  10. adithyasaravanaAugust 17, 2011 at 6:02 PM

    both were nice poems..

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  11. AnonymousAugust 17, 2011 at 9:55 PM

    moon smiles mockingly - luv that.

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  12. Someone is SpecialAugust 18, 2011 at 10:42 AM

    I loved the Haiku RS...

    Someone is Special

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  13. Madeleine Begun KaneAugust 18, 2011 at 11:41 AM

    Lovely verse!

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  14. NankaAugust 18, 2011 at 11:59 PM

    I liked the second one immensely with all the fun writing in your poem!! :) You really take humor from life and pass it on to others :)

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  15. ShailAugust 20, 2011 at 9:36 PM

    You have a thing for the moon :) I see it mentioned often.
    I liked both the haiku and the verse.

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  16. rainysunAugust 21, 2011 at 1:18 AM

    so simple and wonderful poem sir,
    we dream but then we forget whats the reality...

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