Written for
Haiku Heights prompt: Rejoice
Haiku also entred for Haiku My Heart...
OSI Prompt : Try
Jealous Stars Rejoice..
Jealous stars rejoice
At his failure, Moon tries to
Shine in the day..
*****
I Flew With A Cloud....
For endless nights
I had been trying to
Befriend Moon
But every time it took
A step forward
Stars held it tight
In their thoughts
Far deeper in
An unknown place
Somewhere between
Heart and mind..
And whenever I thought
I would fly with a cloud
Sun peeped through
Melting my dream
In its blazing fire
My effort to hold winds
With my hands to
Try and take a flight
Always got blocked
As high walls of doubt
Would arise from nowhere
Whenever I wished to
Have a chit-chat
With colorful flowers
Suddenly butterflies
Would come flying
Out of their hide
Seeking their first right
On smiling flowers, and
I will find myself quietly
Withdrawing and surrendering
To lengthening shadows
But then I didn’t stop trying
For that was my calling
With efforts I succeeded
In befriending Moon
Who gives light to my soul
I flew with a cloud too
That rained on a weeping desert
Making my heart bloom
And now when I talk to flowers
Butterflies sing love songs
Ah! What a happier life, this!
A beautiful rendition and this poem seems to dance and float so well.
ReplyDeleteLove the imagery it created.Loved many lines in this poem but the last verse is the best.
"But then I didn’t stop trying" is the true essence here i think.
Great poem and I see many Haikus simmering in it too.
oh wow :D
ReplyDeletethats a lovely poem there :D
loved the first haiku the most :)
sorry m a lil partial to the moon :P
so for me that takes the cake :D
"And now when I talk to flowers
ReplyDeleteButterflies sing love songs"
Beautiful - both Haiku & poem.
"Whenever I wished to
ReplyDeleteHave a chit-chat
With colorful flowers
Suddenly butterflies
Would come flying
Out of their hide
Seeking their first right
On smiling flowers, and
I will find myself quietly
Withdrawing and surrendering
To lengthening shadows"
I so loved this stanza, could equate it also with man's existence...:)
This is so beautiful Ramesh...:) your poems are always inspiring, of moon, of stars, of sun, of flowers, butterflies...wow...all about nature, their beauty, their mesmerizing characters...:)
I also love the "did not stop trying" ...yes, it only proves how positive you are with life!
To keep trying is the key. Great words.
ReplyDeleteBoth good!
ReplyDeleteis it love poetry or missing muse or nothing?
Both were very much enjoyable reads! Awesome post! =)
ReplyDelete-Weasel
Wonderful job on both, but I always love the longer poems you write. Your words and imagery just seem to pull me in and leave me wanting more to read.
ReplyDeletePyaara Dost,
ReplyDeleteGood Evening!
You are such a wonderful person who does not give up!And God is kind to bless you with the cool moonlight,the fragrance and smiles of flowers and a tender heart to reach the beauty of nature.
Wonderful poem!
Wishing you a wonderful night where the amazing sun will sing a lullaby to you........
Sasneham,
Anu
What do I say Rameshji?? Your poetry is like wine, it's getting better each day. Loved this one!! :)
ReplyDeleteNice write, and true, if you don't keep trying, how can you succeed?
ReplyDeletea happy life indeed!
ReplyDeletereally enjoyed the lines,
Stars held it tight
In their thoughts
lovely!
You turned the dark night into a colourful wing of a butterfly.
ReplyDeletePlease have a good new week.
daily athens
Beautiful. Keep those dreams! Keep trying!
ReplyDeletehere I catch it "But then I didn’t stop trying".. that's what we say and we keep trying and we succeed
ReplyDeletelove blissful endings...
ReplyDeletebeautiful tries and joyful rejoicing...
Beautiful poem,wonderful words chosen carefully to maintain the rhythm of the poem.:)
ReplyDeleteit is a nice poem. i like this!
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful! I love when we befriend nature and get along. It truly is a happier world.
ReplyDeleteTeresa
Wonderful write, and so very true, if we don't keep trying, how will we ever succeed? Thanks so much again for linking with Potluck x
ReplyDeleteWonderful reverie, enjoyed both. I absolutely love the Haiku. Even stars and moon have personality :)
ReplyDeleteI flew with a cloud too
ReplyDeleteThat rained on a weeping desert
Making my heart bloom
beautiful and uplifting! I admire your resilience.
A beautiful poem. You have a very different relationship with the moon that I do - and it's wonderful to hear about. Thank you!
ReplyDeleterelly loved the poem...what flow and imagery!
ReplyDeleteAnd whenever I thought
ReplyDeleteI would fly with a cloud
Sun peeped through
Melting my dream
In its blazing fire
My effort to hold winds
With my hands to
Try and take a flight
Always got blocked
As high walls of doubt
Would arise from nowhere
Love this stanza! Wonderful poem :)
This is absolutely delightful! Made me smile. Thank you .... and I love anything with the moon in it ...
ReplyDeleteJamieDedes
elegant!
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