Sunday, October 3, 2010

I Flew With A Cloud....

Written for
Haiku Heights prompt: Rejoice
Haiku also entred for Haiku My Heart...
OSI
Prompt : Try


Jealous Stars Rejoice..


Jealous stars rejoice
At his failure, Moon tries to
Shine in the day..

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I Flew With A Cloud....


For endless nights
I had been trying to
Befriend Moon
But every time it took
A step forward
Stars held it tight
In their thoughts
Far deeper in
An unknown place
Somewhere between
Heart and mind..

And whenever I thought
I would fly with a cloud
Sun peeped through
Melting my dream
In its blazing fire
My effort to hold winds
With my hands to
Try and take a flight
Always got blocked
As high walls of doubt
Would arise from nowhere

Whenever I wished to
Have a chit-chat
With colorful flowers
Suddenly butterflies
Would come flying
Out of their hide
Seeking their first right
On smiling flowers, and
I will find myself quietly
Withdrawing and surrendering
To lengthening shadows

But then I didn’t stop trying
For that was my calling
With efforts I succeeded
In befriending Moon
Who gives light to my soul
I flew with a cloud too

That rained on a weeping desert
Making my heart bloom
And now when I talk to flowers
Butterflies sing love songs
Ah! What a happier life, this!

27 comments:

  1. A beautiful rendition and this poem seems to dance and float so well.

    Love the imagery it created.Loved many lines in this poem but the last verse is the best.

    "But then I didn’t stop trying" is the true essence here i think.

    Great poem and I see many Haikus simmering in it too.

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  2. oh wow :D
    thats a lovely poem there :D
    loved the first haiku the most :)
    sorry m a lil partial to the moon :P
    so for me that takes the cake :D

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  3. "And now when I talk to flowers
    Butterflies sing love songs"

    Beautiful - both Haiku & poem.

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  4. "Whenever I wished to
    Have a chit-chat
    With colorful flowers
    Suddenly butterflies
    Would come flying
    Out of their hide
    Seeking their first right
    On smiling flowers, and
    I will find myself quietly
    Withdrawing and surrendering
    To lengthening shadows"

    I so loved this stanza, could equate it also with man's existence...:)

    This is so beautiful Ramesh...:) your poems are always inspiring, of moon, of stars, of sun, of flowers, butterflies...wow...all about nature, their beauty, their mesmerizing characters...:)

    I also love the "did not stop trying" ...yes, it only proves how positive you are with life!

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  5. To keep trying is the key. Great words.

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  6. Both were very much enjoyable reads! Awesome post! =)

    -Weasel

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  7. Wonderful job on both, but I always love the longer poems you write. Your words and imagery just seem to pull me in and leave me wanting more to read.

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  8. Pyaara Dost,
    Good Evening!
    You are such a wonderful person who does not give up!And God is kind to bless you with the cool moonlight,the fragrance and smiles of flowers and a tender heart to reach the beauty of nature.
    Wonderful poem!
    Wishing you a wonderful night where the amazing sun will sing a lullaby to you........
    Sasneham,
    Anu

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  9. What do I say Rameshji?? Your poetry is like wine, it's getting better each day. Loved this one!! :)

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  10. Nice write, and true, if you don't keep trying, how can you succeed?

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  11. a happy life indeed!

    really enjoyed the lines,
    Stars held it tight
    In their thoughts


    lovely!

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  12. You turned the dark night into a colourful wing of a butterfly.

    Please have a good new week.

    daily athens

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  13. Beautiful. Keep those dreams! Keep trying!

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  14. here I catch it "But then I didn’t stop trying".. that's what we say and we keep trying and we succeed

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  15. love blissful endings...
    beautiful tries and joyful rejoicing...

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  16. Beautiful poem,wonderful words chosen carefully to maintain the rhythm of the poem.:)

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  17. it is a nice poem. i like this!

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  18. This is wonderful! I love when we befriend nature and get along. It truly is a happier world.

    Teresa

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  19. Wonderful write, and so very true, if we don't keep trying, how will we ever succeed? Thanks so much again for linking with Potluck x

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  20. Wonderful reverie, enjoyed both. I absolutely love the Haiku. Even stars and moon have personality :)

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  21. I flew with a cloud too
    That rained on a weeping desert
    Making my heart bloom

    beautiful and uplifting! I admire your resilience.

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  22. A beautiful poem. You have a very different relationship with the moon that I do - and it's wonderful to hear about. Thank you!

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  23. relly loved the poem...what flow and imagery!

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  24. And whenever I thought
    I would fly with a cloud
    Sun peeped through
    Melting my dream
    In its blazing fire
    My effort to hold winds
    With my hands to
    Try and take a flight
    Always got blocked
    As high walls of doubt
    Would arise from nowhere

    Love this stanza! Wonderful poem :)

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  25. This is absolutely delightful! Made me smile. Thank you .... and I love anything with the moon in it ...

    JamieDedes

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