Saturday, October 30, 2010

Cracks Began to Appear In My Reverie

Written for Haiku Heights Prompt: Mystic and OSI Prompt: Fancy

Eyes meet , smile stems
You envy and call it a fancy,
For me its mystic..


Written for OSI Prompt: Fancy

First a haiku..keeping with my own passion

Earth cuddles in
A blanket of clouds, Moon looks
On, fancies warmth…


Cracks Began to Appear In My Reverie

Deep inside him
Somewhere, lives a giver
But with a weak voice, who
Appears to be getting snubbed
By the surroundings…
Relationships get weaved
Offering threads of trust
But then others entangle
Yarns of selfishness
Not able to make the difference
Continues to be an
Arrogant child, with soft
Soul perhaps made of wax
That can melt on
A little hint of warmth
Which stays away
Failing to penetrate
The thick walls built around
By the sycophants
Yet, wants to explore skies
Of love and humility
But then wings of gold
May be heavier
For such a fanciful flight
Wish he could make it
At least once
Won’t mind lending him
Some wings of thoughts
Capable of taking him
To newer, happier skies
But will he ever ask…
May be not, doesn’t even know
For, it’s not him, but I
Who have been weaving
Such dreams for him
Without realizing, that
He has his own dreams
To follow, to pursue
And it took time but then
Cracks began to appear
In my reverie, and I have tried
And have quietly detached myself
To slip back into my own space
May God help me weave
My own happier dreams
Wings of thoughts will help me
Explore depths and heights
Of a shimmering new world
Yes, it has taken me eons to break
High walls of illusion
And take a leap..
Ah, finally I’m breathing freedom..
It’s not my fancy, it’s for real
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29 comments:

  1. eyeographyOctober 30, 2010 at 12:09 PM

    Nice haiku...
    Beautiful words in the poem..

    "Arrogant child, with soft
    Soul perhaps made of wax
    That can melt on
    A little hint of warmth"

    Lovely... :)

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  2. anupamaOctober 30, 2010 at 7:29 PM

    Pyaara Dost,
    A lovely rainy morning!
    Giving space and dreaming own dreams...........Yes,I can relate so well.I was undergoing a stressful period and now I am at peace with myself and nature.
    Beautifully crafted verses.
    Leaving for temple now.
    Wishing you a wonderful Sunday to relax,
    Sasneham,
    Anu

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  3. Ramesh SoodOctober 31, 2010 at 1:59 AM

    Comment from Anu:

    Pyaara Dost,

    A lovely rainy morning!
    Giving space and dreaming own dreams...........Yes,I can relate so well.I was undergoing a stressful period and now I am at peace with myself and nature.
    Beautifully crafted verses.

    Wishing you a wonderful Sunday to relax,
    Sasneham,
    Anu

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  4. anthonynorthOctober 31, 2010 at 2:18 AM

    Beautiful, deep thinking words, as always.

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  5. Harshad MehtaOctober 31, 2010 at 2:55 AM

    Glad you experience freedom for real now.

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  6. Vinay Leo R.October 31, 2010 at 4:04 AM

    oh I like that fancy, R'ji.. to see someone and just make a connection like that is amazing.. mystical for sure! :D

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  7. JP/debOctober 31, 2010 at 4:46 AM

    some lovely images in your reverie poem...

    soft soul of wax ... brilliant.

    love the emotional depth of this poem.

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  8. Pam OlsonOctober 31, 2010 at 4:47 AM

    Sometimes the most mystical things are found in the ordinary. Nice haiku.

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  9. JeevesOctober 31, 2010 at 4:54 AM

    Lovely haiku

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  10. Sherri B.October 31, 2010 at 5:42 AM

    Your poems are always so spiritually uplifting...I love reading them every week. This one (the last one) was beautiful and so touching...thanks for sharing your words. I also loved your haikus!

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  11. AnonymousOctober 31, 2010 at 11:37 AM

    Really nice poems. I love the last one especially. You create such wonderful images.

    Teresa

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  12. Isha EtheraOctober 31, 2010 at 2:23 PM

    Lovely post.
    :) nice haiku

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  13. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallOctober 31, 2010 at 5:46 PM

    wow, the whole universe is one,
    how divine.

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  14. AnonymousOctober 31, 2010 at 5:57 PM

    You've written some really cool poetry here.
    i like it

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  15. ReflectionsOctober 31, 2010 at 8:03 PM

    Beautiful imagery, deep thoughts. Nicely done!

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  16. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallNovember 1, 2010 at 8:18 AM

    Thanks a lot for linking.
    Harpy Belated Halloween.
    Happy November,

    xx

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  17. EvelynNovember 1, 2010 at 9:34 AM

    that first Haiku is very good...

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  18. BubbaNovember 1, 2010 at 11:04 AM

    Forgive the corny metaphore, but your Potluck dish was like a good curry - delicate, yet spicy.

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  19. Shail RaghuvanshiNovember 1, 2010 at 9:42 PM

    Lovely Ramesh. Beautiful imagery.

    Keep writing..

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  20. Eaton Bennett aka Berenice AlbrechtNovember 2, 2010 at 5:54 AM

    Excellent Haiku...and soulful poetry! :)

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  21. Ramesh SoodNovember 2, 2010 at 10:06 AM

    Thanks a lot to all the friends visiting.. I love writing haikus.. but then sometimes the emotions flow into longer poems too.. nice of you for spending time to read them all...

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  22. Uma AnandaneNovember 2, 2010 at 11:38 AM

    Beautiful Haiku's and wonderful lines woven together as poem..I enjoyed them both

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  23. PattiNovember 3, 2010 at 5:41 AM

    Oh- I loved them all- the haikus and the longer verse. The longer poem reminded me of what I want for my daughter isn't necesarily what she wants...wise words. Loved the line:
    " Arrogant child, with soft
    Soul perhaps made of wax
    That can melt on
    A little hint of warmth"

    Great job!!!

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  24. AnonymousNovember 3, 2010 at 7:05 AM

    Please help giving (belated) birthday wishes to 3 or 4 fellow poets:

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/03/happy-birthday-eric-dom/

    Thanks a lot for the support.
    Happy November!
    Your presence adds light to our space, keep shining!
    xxx

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  25. Cassiopeia RisesNovember 3, 2010 at 9:30 AM

    Beautiful poetry and images my friend. Your words run deep within ones soul.

    Melanie

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  26. Someone is SpecialNovember 4, 2010 at 4:34 PM

    Wonderful Rameshji..

    --Someone Is Special--

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  27. Tammie LeeNovember 4, 2010 at 5:06 PM

    you have a lovely way of embracing life and your poems are full of this spirit.

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  28. Catherine MackieNovember 5, 2010 at 2:43 AM

    In your mystic haiku I get the impression of a spouse observing that little spark that flows between two people across a crowded room, viz other spouse and AN Other individual, and the little green monster rearing its head...

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  29. AmityNovember 6, 2010 at 4:40 PM

    smiles are always mystic for me...

    I admire your love for the moon! IT has always been a beautiful subject of your haikus Ramesh!

    And your poem that followed, I am quite impressed and i could relate so much to your thoughts...


    Very well said Ramesh! You're one of the best I have been reading lately! :-)

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