Wednesday, October 6, 2010

Moon Shines , Earth Hides

Haiku Written for 3WW Prompts: Sheen, Hint, Lust
Also for Haiku My Heart


Extra sheen hints lust
In eyes of stars, Moon shines
Without bother


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Extra sheen hints lust
In eyes of stars, Earth hides
Behind clouds

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21 comments:

  1. DeborahOctober 6, 2010 at 10:28 AM

    Just lovely :o)

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  2. Voices of NLDOctober 6, 2010 at 10:42 AM

    They're both beautiful but something about the first got to me

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  3. AngelOctober 6, 2010 at 12:32 PM

    Very poetic.

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  4. eyeographyOctober 6, 2010 at 1:01 PM

    Beautifully written...I love them both... :)

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  5. Thom GabrukiewiczOctober 6, 2010 at 5:39 PM

    i like both, equally.

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  6. JP/debOctober 6, 2010 at 10:33 PM

    the second one really worked.

    peace,
    JP/deborah

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  7. BeyondOctober 6, 2010 at 11:28 PM

    wow "in eyes of stars, earth hides behind clouds"

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  8. NankaOctober 7, 2010 at 12:36 AM

    Great haiku's these two
    Loved them both equally too
    Shiny stars i see

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  9. anupamaOctober 7, 2010 at 8:30 AM

    Pyara Dost,
    Good Evening!
    A hide out is a must for all.:)
    Well expressed poem.I enjoyed reading them.
    Wishing you a lovely night,
    Sasneham,
    Anu

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  10. Toyin O.October 7, 2010 at 2:56 PM

    interesting words!

    http://youcanfacetodaybecausehelives.blogspot.com

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  11. gautami tripathyOctober 7, 2010 at 5:33 PM

    Both are good.

    a subtle hint

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  12. SpadomanOctober 8, 2010 at 3:43 AM

    Many participants include a photo., You have painted an image in my mind.mI have reverence for the heavens. I can see the moon here, and I can imagine the Sacred Earth Mother behind the clouds.Cool!

    Peace.

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  13. Ramesh SoodOctober 8, 2010 at 5:44 AM

    Thanks to everyone for visiting and commenting.. it emboldens..

    @ Spadoman, yes, I had been inbetween inclined to paste a photo too.. but then realised that they say Haiku shouldn't say, it should show .. so I thought why then put a photo why not let people see what they want to.. Thanks a lot..

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  14. deb did itOctober 8, 2010 at 6:11 AM

    your words paint a beautiful image

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  15. *jean*October 8, 2010 at 6:26 AM

    lovely!

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  16. AnonymousOctober 8, 2010 at 6:44 AM

    This is a true haiku - nature imagery hinting at emotion. Just lovely.

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  17. AnonymousOctober 8, 2010 at 7:30 AM

    Very deep. Fascinating. Thanks.

    Have a nice day, Boonie

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  18. rebeccaOctober 9, 2010 at 6:00 AM

    ramesh,
    thank you for your offering..your word play creates a moving heavenly picture.
    so glad to have your beauty here among the haiku devoted.
    warmly,
    rebecca

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  19. EG CameraGirlOctober 9, 2010 at 3:46 PM

    Lovely words, cleverly written!

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  20. AnonymousOctober 10, 2010 at 1:04 PM

    there is something so mesmerizing abt the stars, the moon, the earth our home... the celestial... and to think with lust and nonchalance makes them all the more interesting... it is as if you are a storyteller beginning to tell a story.. and the haiku is yr intro to lure the listener in... you know that one about one thousand and one tales...

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  21. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallOctober 12, 2010 at 8:57 AM

    amazing...

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