Wednesday, October 6, 2010

Moon Shines , Earth Hides

Haiku Written for 3WW Prompts: Sheen, Hint, Lust
Also for Haiku My Heart


Extra sheen hints lust
In eyes of stars, Moon shines
Without bother


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Extra sheen hints lust
In eyes of stars, Earth hides
Behind clouds

22 comments:

  1. They're both beautiful but something about the first got to me

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  2. Beautifully written...I love them both... :)

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  3. the second one really worked.

    peace,
    JP/deborah

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  4. wow "in eyes of stars, earth hides behind clouds"

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  5. Great haiku's these two
    Loved them both equally too
    Shiny stars i see

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  6. Pyara Dost,
    Good Evening!
    A hide out is a must for all.:)
    Well expressed poem.I enjoyed reading them.
    Wishing you a lovely night,
    Sasneham,
    Anu

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  7. interesting words!

    http://youcanfacetodaybecausehelives.blogspot.com

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  8. Many participants include a photo., You have painted an image in my mind.mI have reverence for the heavens. I can see the moon here, and I can imagine the Sacred Earth Mother behind the clouds.Cool!

    Peace.

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  9. Thanks to everyone for visiting and commenting.. it emboldens..

    @ Spadoman, yes, I had been inbetween inclined to paste a photo too.. but then realised that they say Haiku shouldn't say, it should show .. so I thought why then put a photo why not let people see what they want to.. Thanks a lot..

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  10. your words paint a beautiful image

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  11. This is a true haiku - nature imagery hinting at emotion. Just lovely.

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  12. Very deep. Fascinating. Thanks.

    Have a nice day, Boonie

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  13. ramesh,
    thank you for your offering..your word play creates a moving heavenly picture.
    so glad to have your beauty here among the haiku devoted.
    warmly,
    rebecca

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  14. Lovely words, cleverly written!

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  15. there is something so mesmerizing abt the stars, the moon, the earth our home... the celestial... and to think with lust and nonchalance makes them all the more interesting... it is as if you are a storyteller beginning to tell a story.. and the haiku is yr intro to lure the listener in... you know that one about one thousand and one tales...

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