Friday, December 2, 2011

Dreams Spill From the Eyes..



Friday Haiku ..for
Rebecca's Haiku My Heart...



Reading posts on 
A virgin a day
My worlds expand..


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Have tried to catch a moment...in the haiku..here..



Her face hides
Behind a red woolen scarf
Eyes spill dreams..


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A child cries
Mother waves smiles
School bus leaves

Edited based on Bill's feedback as part of my learning..

A child cries
Anxious mother watches
School bus leave..


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RS : )

9 comments:

  1. Wonderful Haiku ~ thanks, namaste, Carol (A Creative Harbor) linked w/Corazon

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  2. More creative words ~ you must like to write Haiku ~ thanks, namaste, Carol (A Creative Harbor) linked w/corazon VAD for Dec

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  3. Those dream-spilling eyes are so seductive, Ramesh!


    haiku on Friday
    a handful of syllables
    scattered heart to heart


    My Friday Haiku

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  4. ramesh, wonderful haiku! so filled with love and visions.

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  5. Ramesh,
    Both of your haikus paint a beautiful and vivid picture of relationship and share an intimacy of emotion usually evoked with image. But you have managed to paint it with words. You are a haiku artist. wonderful my friend.
    Namaste,
    Noelle

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  6. A nice pivot in "her face hides."

    "a child cries" is a list of three items; haiku is generally a 2-part structure on the principle of juxtaposition.

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  7. You are a master of the haiku in a form that I understand. You always write so personally and images in my own mind are always triggered.

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  8. All wonderful!You are good at this!!!

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  9. That's so true...every day a new day and reading others enriches our world the more!

    The rest are awesome too!

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