Friday Haiku ..for
Rebecca's Haiku My Heart...
Reading posts on
A virgin a day
My worlds expand..
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Have tried to catch a moment...in the haiku..here..
Her face hides
Behind a red woolen scarf
Eyes spill dreams..
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A child cries
Mother waves smiles
School bus leaves
Edited based on Bill's feedback as part of my learning..
A child cries
Anxious mother watches
School bus leave..
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RS : )
Wonderful Haiku ~ thanks, namaste, Carol (A Creative Harbor) linked w/Corazon
ReplyDeleteMore creative words ~ you must like to write Haiku ~ thanks, namaste, Carol (A Creative Harbor) linked w/corazon VAD for Dec
ReplyDeleteThose dream-spilling eyes are so seductive, Ramesh!
ReplyDeletehaiku on Friday
a handful of syllables
scattered heart to heart
My Friday Haiku
ramesh, wonderful haiku! so filled with love and visions.
ReplyDeleteRamesh,
ReplyDeleteBoth of your haikus paint a beautiful and vivid picture of relationship and share an intimacy of emotion usually evoked with image. But you have managed to paint it with words. You are a haiku artist. wonderful my friend.
Namaste,
Noelle
A nice pivot in "her face hides."
ReplyDelete"a child cries" is a list of three items; haiku is generally a 2-part structure on the principle of juxtaposition.
You are a master of the haiku in a form that I understand. You always write so personally and images in my own mind are always triggered.
ReplyDeleteAll wonderful!You are good at this!!!
ReplyDeleteThat's so true...every day a new day and reading others enriches our world the more!
ReplyDeleteThe rest are awesome too!