Wednesday, December 14, 2011

HE STILL STANDS THERE...




Written for 3WW..

Immobile; adjective: Not moving; motionless; incapable of moving or being moved.
Proximity; noun: Nearness in space, time, or relationship.
Retribution; noun: Punishment that is considered to be morally right and fully deserved.


HE STILL STANDS THERE...

Obsessed, he would
Follow her everyday
From a distance
Troubling her, teasing her
Never got favoured with
Proximity, one day
She turned and threw
A stone at him
With ‘smile’ written on it
He just stood there, awestruck
Next day as she slowly
Walked towards him
Oh, he turned absolutely immobile
She looked into his eyes
Pointed a finger
And said, “Statue!”
Turned and went away
It was her way of retribution
Life kept moving
He still stands there
In that moment, wondering...

And she must have raised a family
Playing 'Statue' with her kids..

RS :)


12 comments:

  1. I imagine a Narnia-esque imagination..a White Witch..but a fun white witch..lovely story telling Ramesh..Jae

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  2. I agree with Jaerose the witch in Narnia! Wonderful write.
    Blessings

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  3. That's quite a spell she had on him!

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  4. Totally taken over, there. Nice one.

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  5. Hey, I say if it works, USE it on the kids! ha. It leaves us wondering what would have happened if he had smiled at her :)

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  6. Beautifully expressed, Ramesh. Thank God that life does still keep moving forward despite the 'what ifs'! x

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  7. I like this so very much! Impressive write.

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  8. I love the ending "He still stands there
    In that moment, wondering . . . ."

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  9. This is a great piece to keep us all wondering....

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  10. Be careful where your obsession takes you. I too have been there but luckily she just laughed and I was able to lick my wounds. This piece evoked painful memories for me. You clearly write from experience.

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  11. wonderful..life does keep moving.. we cannot afford to be statues..

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