Thursday, September 8, 2011

Can't Let Love Erode..



Written for  3WW : Observe, Heart, Erode
Also shared with : Rebecca's Haiku My Heart too...



Can't Let Love Erode..


She deeply observes
Yet keeps a lot in her heart
Can’t let love erode..


Can’t let love erode
So walks on the hot sand too
She deeply suffers


She  deeply suffers
Yet loves to smile without blink
You can’t make it out


You can’t make it out
Because you only see, and
She deeply observes…



 RS : ) 

11 comments:

  1. It causes much erosion..carrying the weight of seeing..holding it inside..sometimes you just need to let it out..Jae ;)

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  2. You have portrayed a beautiful 'she', a woman very devoted and having single-minded love and loyalty!! Good one and a tribute to her RS!!

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  3. nice loops RS...thanks for the write up...She is beautiful..!!

    thanks for reminding me of the loop poetry...its been a long time since i have written one...will write one soon..!!

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  4. Powerful...all she suffers she keeps inside

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  5. I love when you do the loop poetry. This one is beautiful. Speaking about love and allowing it to continue without erosion, a very good thought.

    peace

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  6. my heart hurts at the phrase, "she deeply suffers." i hope she finds a love that sets her heart free...

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  7. Such a wonderful 'loop'... The poetry is marvelous too! I enjoyed visiting you today!

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  8. Wonderful! Love the form!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/i-am-loved/

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  9. sweet and encouraging words.
    enjoyed it.

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  10. Nice, with a startling end. I had to do kind of a double take, and read it again, feeling that I had missed something, or that something was missing. It wasn't-- you've written it all in there.

    It was as if the last lines of the poem were speaking to me, "You only see-- she observes."

    Thank you for posting this poem. So crisp and succinct, and beautiful at the same time.

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