Thursday, September 15, 2011

Wind-chime Sings


The Height of Haiku Challenge Day 16

Prompt: Chime 
 
(My first attempt on 3-5-3…)

Wind-chime Sings

Wind-chime sings
Songs of the morning
I sit quiet…


I sit quiet
Soft tinkle fills my heart
Wind-chime sings

Wind-chime sings
Lost songs of angels
Wings I get

Wings I get
To the beat of flaps
Wind-chime sings..


Wind-chime sings
Dancing with the breeze
My feet tap


My feet tap
Happy flowers sway
Wind-chime sings..



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A bunch of wind-chimes
Tied to Elephant’s tail
Tinkles with ant’s sleep



RS : )


Note: Edited 3rd and 4th para based on some constructive feedback by Nanka : )

17 comments:

  1. nice take on the 3-5-3 form Rameshji.. somehow, I felt that just the first one alone is most beautiful than the whole series together! :)

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  2. The loops of 3-5-3 haiku was penned down nice.. Isn't it beautiful with what we write with restricted words ?Few words are better than long describing sentences :)

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  3. Beautiful musical cycle weaves the haikus together! Enchanting!

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  4. Perfectly wonderful!

    Let my claps go with the wind chimes' song...:)

    Very nice, indeed...haven't tried this one, but might do soon!

    And of course...believe me or not, I first looked for the ant and elephant take, ha ha ha..obviously it has become my favorite..:P

    Looking forward to more ant and elephant stories!

    By the way I am back to my old-first-love-blog. Hope you still have my link in your list or rather you will be directed there in my haiku offering today!

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  5. Like the connecting phrases from one haiku to another... wind chime singing sounds wonderful ~

    I enjoy tinkling with the ant's sleep~

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  6. Enjoyed this. Both rhyme and Haiku.

    Elephant and ant series is wonderful.Do you have them put on one page? If so post them. Will be fun to read.

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  7. Wonderful lilting music here RS!! Excellent work except for the 3rd and 4th where you have rhymed!! I don't care I just loved it!! My hats off to the elephant and the Ant who never fail to entertain :D

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  8. You did very well with 3-5-3 my friend. It is a lovely set of Haiku. I love the images you present and of course I always love your elephant and friend ant. Great work.


    Melanie

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  9. Your set of Haiku is just as nice as when I first read them. Good job my friend...Haiku My Heart to you.


    Melanie

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  10. A bunch of wind-chimes
    Tied to Elephant’s tail
    Tinkles with ant’s sleep

    Chimes and Ant in sinc
    Snoring Ant In tune with chimes
    Smiling Elephant

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  11. Finally seeing where the chimes theme is coming from! Love yours!

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  12. Chimes tied to the elephant's tail! I see and hear them, Ramesh--and I'm laughing with delight!

    Chimes here and here and here

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  13. I love your haiku. They are indeed musically delightful.

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  14. I love how you play with words and forms. Love the elephant image.

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  15. I like them all. They are all wonderful. Love the idea of Angel Songs, but I have to admit that the elephant and ant image at the end is my absolute favorite! Great job Ramesh.
    Noelle

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