Monday, September 24, 2012

No Sleep In Her Eyes..


September 25, 2012  Prompt: Sleep


No Sleep In Her Eyes..


Blooms of fragrant dreams
float in empty space, waiting;
no sleep in her eyes

No sleep in her eyes;
float in empty space waiting,
blooms of fragrant dreams..



RS:)

21 comments:

  1. I loved the repetition ... so powerful !!!

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  2. I like floating in empty space ~ Nice one RS ~

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  3. great poem ... the repetition is good,but I would have liked it to end 'a twist'

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  4. Your poems always remind me of waves of the ocean :)

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  5. Ramesh--these haiku have a hypnotic, dreaming quality to them. Gorgeous, too.

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  6. Floating in empty space ... great line. I love this way of writing haiku ... looks familiar Naisaiku?

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  7. Lovely! Sounds like a lullaby to me, especially 'blooms of fragrant dreams."

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  8. I ,too, like "floating in empty space" Lovely,,,

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  9. I sense waiting in this work. And I can feel it. Beautiful.

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  10. The reversal and repitition work so well, Ramesh. I like this very much.

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  11. Wish she closes her eyes and smell those fragrant dreams....Lovely haiku....Loved the reversal repetition....sounds heavenly

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  12. You are so creative not only with the word pictures but with the form itself! Pure imaginative creativity.

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  13. It gives a wonderful feel after reading it..well crafted

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  14. the repetition has weaved more magic into the already magical words... lovely read!

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  15. Which is first, the gift or the gifted? Lovely.

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  16. Such a lovely haiku Sir. I love the way you compose.


    ~Sayantini Bhattacharya
    http://sayantini-bhattacharya.blogspot.in/2012/09/s-l-e-e-p.html

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  17. The words of the first one reflected in the second one..., a river in between... lovely, Ramesh.

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  18. Hi Ramesh,
    Even though there is repetition, it is very unique how each one has a special and distinct meaning. The segments are very different and express yin & yang to me. beautiful!

    :-) Nimu Shenoy

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