April 12, 2012
Written for Haiku Heights
April Challenge..
Prompt: Coherent
I
Incoherent Confession
Incoherent
last words of a confession;
his peaceful death
His peaceful death;
it's a blessing that she
doesn't understand..
Doesn't understand;
she now lives a quiet
coherent life..
Coherent life;
ah, her dreams are no more
incoherent
****
II
Branded Shirt
Coherent
design with cool colours;
branded shirt
Branded shirt
I buy on the spot;
sales discount
Sales discount;
a similar one lies with
label gone
Label gone;
doubt doesn’t find design
coherent..
RS:)
amazing, both of them... simply awesome... the second one, i cannot even write prose on such themes..here you are, Rameshji, blowing the top off with a wonderful haiku. :)
ReplyDeleteahh.the first one.. a pang of pain and indeed very coherent,her life after.....lovely one that.. :)
it is always fun reading your haiku..i enjoyed both:)
ReplyDeleteawesome Haiku RS...loved the "branded shirt"... :)
ReplyDeleteWhoa... that's one set of truly innovative Haiku! too cool...
ReplyDeleteThe first is set is like a movie plot. A whole story unfolds. The second? Human nature, for sure.
ReplyDeleteVery nice cascading haiku...I see you are very inspired
ReplyDelete:-)
I'm glad you started with INcoherent - I did too. For shame on the second one! A bargain is more important than a designer label! (I am joking - both haiku chains are terrific.
ReplyDeleteyou have just played with the words...its wonderful :)
ReplyDeletekeep smiling always :)
wonderfully expressed sir :)
ReplyDeleteShopping makes me incoherent!
ReplyDelete“Six Takes on ‘Coherent’”
Both are amazing!....enjoyed reading them :)
ReplyDeleteYour haikus are always a delight.
ReplyDeleteYou did again Ramesh ... two nice sets of haiku in your beautiful cascading form.
ReplyDeleteNamaste
Not one but two ... delightful!! :)
ReplyDeleteYour style has rubbed off a number of participants ... you are a great teacher by example, Ramesh!!
Day 12 ~~ Coherent?
I loved "Incoherent Confession" - that movement from his incoherence to her coherence.
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