Wednesday, April 11, 2012

Incoherent Confession..



April 12, 2012
Written for Haiku Heights
April Challenge..



Prompt: Coherent

I

Incoherent Confession


Incoherent
last words of a confession;
his peaceful death

His peaceful death;
it's a blessing that she
doesn't understand..

Doesn't understand;
she now lives a quiet
coherent life..

Coherent life;
ah, her dreams are no more
incoherent

****

II

Branded Shirt

Coherent
design with cool colours;
branded shirt

Branded shirt
I buy on the spot;
sales discount

Sales discount;
a similar one lies with
label gone

Label gone;
doubt doesn’t find design
coherent..


RS:)

15 comments:

  1. amazing, both of them... simply awesome... the second one, i cannot even write prose on such themes..here you are, Rameshji, blowing the top off with a wonderful haiku. :)

    ahh.the first one.. a pang of pain and indeed very coherent,her life after.....lovely one that.. :)

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  2. it is always fun reading your haiku..i enjoyed both:)

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  3. awesome Haiku RS...loved the "branded shirt"... :)

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  4. Whoa... that's one set of truly innovative Haiku! too cool...

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  5. The first is set is like a movie plot. A whole story unfolds. The second? Human nature, for sure.

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  6. Very nice cascading haiku...I see you are very inspired
    :-)

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  7. I'm glad you started with INcoherent - I did too. For shame on the second one! A bargain is more important than a designer label! (I am joking - both haiku chains are terrific.

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  8. you have just played with the words...its wonderful :)
    keep smiling always :)

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  9. wonderfully expressed sir :)

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  10. Both are amazing!....enjoyed reading them :)

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  11. Your haikus are always a delight.

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  12. You did again Ramesh ... two nice sets of haiku in your beautiful cascading form.

    Namaste

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  13. Not one but two ... delightful!! :)
    Your style has rubbed off a number of participants ... you are a great teacher by example, Ramesh!!
    Day 12 ~~ Coherent?

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  14. I loved "Incoherent Confession" - that movement from his incoherence to her coherence.

    Richard

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