My Second Post for the
Prompt SUMMER .. at Haiku Heights
will also be shared with
Haiku My Heart..
will also be shared with
Haiku My Heart..
on a more sombre note...
She Swallows Sun
It is summer;
on the burning city road
she walks bare feet
She walks bare feet
pursuing her day's bread;
air conditioned cars
Air conditioned cars
zoom past releasing more heat;
strength of spirit
Strength of spirit;
immune to all seasons
poverty smiles
Poverty smiles;
sitting under a big tree,
she swallows Sun
She swallows sun
each day, every day;
it is summer..
RS:)
As an after thougth, I edited the line 'Child of Poverty' and
made it to 'Poverty Smiles'..after Jayanth perhaps Jayanth had commented....
Haiku My Heart
As an after thougth, I edited the line 'Child of Poverty' and
made it to 'Poverty Smiles'..after Jayanth perhaps Jayanth had commented....
:) aahh!!
ReplyDelete"Strength of spirit;
immune to all seasons
child of povery"
such a beautifully expressed cascaded haiku themed around the life of 'the child of poverty'..
there is so much depth in this one sir, i feel it.. reading it takes the feeling right through heart to guts.. sombre in deed.
lovely, sir! amazing!
Wow! This one's amazing... i could actually picture her passing by me!
ReplyDelete"Strength of spirit;
immune to all seasons"
Sooo deep!
heart touching... and the bitter truth ... beautifully expressed :)
ReplyDeleteThis is such a strong image. It breaks my heart. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSummer is not fun and games for everyone. Thank you for the reminder. A special haiku.
ReplyDeleteThis is touching haiku...and harsh reality of many poor people...!
ReplyDeleteThis is a wow set! Definitely a keeper.
ReplyDeleteThis is an exquisite chain of haiku. The flow is so well conceived! And very enlightening. Sometimes the summer sun is the only constant and it can be relentless.
ReplyDeletePoverty smiles,
ReplyDeleteshe swallows sun..incredible lines
'She walks bare feet' and 'poverty smiles' are so simple yet so powerful phrases. I liked your treatment which swifts gently from a practical perspective to the emotional side of it. Glad to find your work.
ReplyDeleteThe hindi couplet you shared on my blog is beautiful beyond words. A big thanks for that Sir.
just saw ur comments in saru's blog :) got impressed & that made me to visit ur blog which is truly soulful poem;
ReplyDeleteso what if not blessed with many readers;
heart speaks the truth :)
& thats enough even a soul admired it :)
not necessary to have bulk readers!
i loved ur poems will be back when u update,
till then keep smiling & writing :)
I love the was that you tell a story. You have included some memorable phrases! Thanks!
ReplyDeleteI love your poems, I do visit the haiku list 'from top to bottom' in order, and it's always so nice to arrive at your blog and 'drink your haiku'. Thanks again!
ReplyDeleteoh ramesh this is so powerful and bittersweet.
ReplyDeletei am greatly moved by your story haiku and the strength of this nod to summer and a challenged life so many live day in and day out through every season.
Wow.
ReplyDeleteyou've done it again.
Gentle and harsh, both. Nicely put together.
ReplyDelete"She swallows sun", 4 words that paint such a vivid picture. An exquisite write
ReplyDeleteI was trying to draw a picture all in my mind after reading this, spirit of poverty, it was all hazy. I wonder where does the human spirit lie?
ReplyDeleteI could actually see the woman walking in the summer heat.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!
The other day I had gone to someone's house in the village and came out sweating like a pig and thinking how those simple people were not even feeling or even thinking of the heat while all I was doing was thinking of it.
"strength of spirit" is what it is all about.
A story of real life drama so common for many. Not to be confused with discomfort, as she swallows sunshine for strength, for she has more 'light'.
ReplyDeletePeace