Prompt: Koi Pond
She sits on the edge
of Koi pond, mesmerised;
ah, colourful fish
Ah, colourful fish
try to catch her reflection;
moon floats serenely
Moon floats serenely
amidst the fish in koi pond;
a birds flies over
A bird flies over
betraying nightly silence;
moon-lit water shines
Moon-lit water shines,
her smile creates ripples;
she sits on the edge
beautiful haiku.. and romantic.. a lovely image it creates.!! loved it very much, Ramesh ji...ReplyDelete
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If you'd like to read mine, here it is: http://blackandwhiteheart.wordpress.com/2013/04/11/april-haiku-month-day-12-koi-pond/
Jayanth....You are first to be here....thanks....for your appreciation..Delete
Ramesh sir, your haikus are pleasure to read. They are so profound and poetic. Enigmatic indeed...each line is full of meaning and beautiful visualisation. :)ReplyDelete
Beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder...you are a kind an beautiful soul..and that's why...Delete
Hypnotic and romantic!ReplyDelete
Hypmotic is a beautiful word.. you made my day..Delete
Yeah, I agree with wabisabi---its hypnotic and romantic!! Lovely l'il stories..ReplyDelete
Oh how beautifully have you used the word 'l'il' I am delighted...Delete
I like how her smile creates ripples. Well done!ReplyDelete
In fact I was absolutely surprised myself...thanks...a lot..Delete
Another lovely and romantic haiku cascade.ReplyDelete
Keep walking in here...you may find many more...Delete
Thanks for your appreciation...
Love the cycle effect of the haiku! Like a meditation on a romantic painting!ReplyDelete
"Like a meditation on a romantic painting!"Delete
Gemma I meditated on these words of yours.. Thanks a lot!!!
A beautiful Haiku and beautiful imagery created once again Ramesh.ReplyDelete
Thanks.. keep visiting..your encouragement will make me to do it again and again..Delete
Elegant and mesmerizing...thank you.ReplyDelete
Elegance of your comment Mesmerises me...Delete
I'm on the edge much of the time too, but I'm not nearly as serene as the one of whom you write!ReplyDelete
Schools of Koi
MMT.... I am sure you have had your moments ...thanks a lot... I have often wondered about what name and face you have...and it's alright...Delete
Right now I see a face in my mind's eye which has a very serene look..
Beautiful experience narrated in this fine haiku.ReplyDelete
Thanks a lot... but I always write from mmy imagination...by being in the place myself...taking a flight of thoughts...and just put what I see...Delete
By that, i mean experience of the person or character you are depicting. Beautiful indeed.Delete
A bird flies over, betraying the nightly silence. Usually birds are still at night. What do you wish to convey ? I didn't understand.ReplyDelete
Take it as an innocent flight of a poetic mind...Haiku is all about creating images...and I bet you did see a bird flying over...even if it usually doesn't happen...enjoy the flight of imagination..why make an effort to understand...few things need to be left the way they happen to be...
So very beautiful! Mayb the bird is an owl? ;)ReplyDelete
Ha, ha, ha..thanks Pranita..to come to my rescue...Delete
I agree with Pranita. The bird could be an owl. ThanxDelete
You always manage to find beautiful words for your responses to prompts. I tend towards the pragmatic, and regret it!ReplyDelete
Oh, Viv.. a poet shares from the heart... I wish to continue to practice happiness....and therefore ..keep trying to see happiness and joy spread all around..,as a matter of choice..Delete
I love how your set takes a full circle... Awesome Ramesh ji!ReplyDelete
I started this style...and don't know if I pioneered it...but let me share the link of that poem here with you:Delete
I am sure you will like it..
Thanks for your comment... I do try that each should be able to stand on its own too...
Fascinating and RS you have outdone yourself here today!! :)ReplyDelete
The imagery here is superb....
'Moon floats serenely
amidst the fish in koi pond;
a birds flies over'
Must add that every line with ref to the Moon is a pleasure to read!!
Aha, Nanka...I got this 'have outdone yourself' for perhaps third time if I can recall...this is what really helps me... when I sit to write ..such wishes help my heart, mind and soul become one and I see things in my mind and the words flow...they really do..don't know from where...perhaps they are born out of the positive energy all the kind hearts release here in this space..Delete
Please keep visiting...I read your haiku..and what colourful pictures you have... will ask someone to help me find a way to comment on your haiku..
Hw picturesque ur haiku is!ReplyDelete
Thanks Satya.. so nice of you... I am happy that you saw what my haiku wanted to show...keep visiting..Delete
this is so quietly beautiful, so full of calm and present mindfulness.
thank you for a peaceful interlude of gorgeous haiku.
Thanks Rebecca... Just can't miss out on the happy space that you have created with the right name... Haiku My Heart...Delete
Your presence here enahances me..
Beautiful cascade Ramesh. Finely craftedReplyDelete
Oh Thanks!!! Reading you has been a pleasure..indeed..Your visit enhances me..Delete
the first and last touch me to my soulReplyDelete
Thanks Emma...your visit stirs mine...I am so happy...Delete
Beautiful haiku! "her smile creates ripple", I really like that line! :)
Thanks Claudia..I am sure you will like to visit again,,Delete
her smile creates ripples...ReplyDelete
that is just so wonderful a line.
And true. ♥♥
Thanks Priti.Lisa..Your comment enhances me...I like the hearts here..Delete
The koi certainly do give a beautiful soothing effect and so does your haiku:)ReplyDelete
So nice of you...in fact when I visualised the scene in my mind's eye I too felt a special calm..thanks a lot for your appreciation..Delete
I found your serene poem again today on Haiku my Heart. A reread of such a nice poem is good for my serenity! Here's my poem today :ReplyDelete
Oh, WabiSabiPoet...it feels good to know that you enjoyed reading it second time...Delete
This is beautiful, totally mesmerizing !!!ReplyDelete
Great chain and I agree with the othersReplyDelete
Listen to breath
No Breath, Birds still flying