Monday, April 9, 2012

She Swallows Sun

My Second Post for the
Prompt SUMMER .. at Haiku Heights
will also be shared with

Haiku My Heart..
on a more sombre note...


She Swallows Sun


It is summer;
on the burning city road
she walks bare feet

She walks bare feet
pursuing her day's bread;
air conditioned cars

Air conditioned cars
zoom past releasing more heat;
strength of spirit

Strength of spirit;
immune to all seasons
 poverty smiles

Poverty smiles;
sitting under a big tree,
she swallows Sun

She swallows sun
each day, every day;
it is summer..

RS:)

As an after thougth, I edited the line 'Child of Poverty' and
made it to 'Poverty Smiles'..after Jayanth perhaps Jayanth had commented....

Haiku My Heart

20 comments:

  1. :) aahh!!

    "Strength of spirit;
    immune to all seasons
    child of povery"

    such a beautifully expressed cascaded haiku themed around the life of 'the child of poverty'..

    there is so much depth in this one sir, i feel it.. reading it takes the feeling right through heart to guts.. sombre in deed.

    lovely, sir! amazing!

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  2. Wow! This one's amazing... i could actually picture her passing by me!

    "Strength of spirit;
    immune to all seasons"

    Sooo deep!

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  3. heart touching... and the bitter truth ... beautifully expressed :)

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  4. This is such a strong image. It breaks my heart. Well done.

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  5. Summer is not fun and games for everyone. Thank you for the reminder. A special haiku.

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  6. This is touching haiku...and harsh reality of many poor people...!

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  7. This is a wow set! Definitely a keeper.

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  8. This is an exquisite chain of haiku. The flow is so well conceived! And very enlightening. Sometimes the summer sun is the only constant and it can be relentless.

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  9. Poverty smiles,

    she swallows sun..incredible lines

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  10. 'She walks bare feet' and 'poverty smiles' are so simple yet so powerful phrases. I liked your treatment which swifts gently from a practical perspective to the emotional side of it. Glad to find your work.

    The hindi couplet you shared on my blog is beautiful beyond words. A big thanks for that Sir.

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  11. just saw ur comments in saru's blog :) got impressed & that made me to visit ur blog which is truly soulful poem;

    so what if not blessed with many readers;
    heart speaks the truth :)
    & thats enough even a soul admired it :)
    not necessary to have bulk readers!

    i loved ur poems will be back when u update,
    till then keep smiling & writing :)

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  12. I love the was that you tell a story. You have included some memorable phrases! Thanks!

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  13. I love your poems, I do visit the haiku list 'from top to bottom' in order, and it's always so nice to arrive at your blog and 'drink your haiku'. Thanks again!

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  14. oh ramesh this is so powerful and bittersweet.
    i am greatly moved by your story haiku and the strength of this nod to summer and a challenged life so many live day in and day out through every season.

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  15. Gentle and harsh, both. Nicely put together.

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  16. "She swallows sun", 4 words that paint such a vivid picture. An exquisite write

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  17. I was trying to draw a picture all in my mind after reading this, spirit of poverty, it was all hazy. I wonder where does the human spirit lie?

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  18. I could actually see the woman walking in the summer heat.
    Beautiful!

    The other day I had gone to someone's house in the village and came out sweating like a pig and thinking how those simple people were not even feeling or even thinking of the heat while all I was doing was thinking of it.

    "strength of spirit" is what it is all about.

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  19. A story of real life drama so common for many. Not to be confused with discomfort, as she swallows sunshine for strength, for she has more 'light'.

    Peace

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