Wednesday, August 18, 2010

Haiku for 3WW, Haiku Heights, OSI

Oh, HAIKUs! I have got fascinated by them in just about a week - before that we were strangers - and perhaps they with they would keep on knocking to enter my mind and get spread on the page.. so spilling one here. Hope you will like ...

3WW : Phase, Stumble, Grimace Haiku Heights: Strange OSI:Beginning

Words stumbled
Beginning of a strange phase

Creativity grimaced..

Edited version to make it a true haiku hopefully... would love to know from you..

A sad new phase begins
Creativty grimaces
Strange, words stumble


  1. I think every poet has moments like this. Nicely said.

  2. I like the poem but wanted to let you know, that from what I've read and heard, a true Haiku has 5 syllables, 7 syllables and then 5 again in the last line. Just so you know.

  3. Stumbling can cause a lot of pain.

  4. I know the feeling. I like how you used the words to convey this oh so writerly truth.

  5. Saying so much with so few words. Nice!

  6. Thanks everyone for reaching here and encouraging me..

    @Yes true haiku is what you say.. and taking it in right spirit I have tried that too.. But you will agree less than total 17 syllables not necessarily in the propotion is an acceptable form.. I agree more than 17 syllables is not an hiaku..sorry missed it in original thought.. wrongly calculated for the word 'Creativity'..

  7. Counting syllables—
    if you have the right number,
    do you have haiku?

    Or do haiku gods
    take you by surprise, choke you,
    and leave you gasping?


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  9. We at Haiku Heights accept modern haikus too, where there is total 17 syllables or less.

    The conflict in the number of syllables is usually because the traditional Haiku originated in Japan, and the 5-7-5 form is taken for the Japanese syllables or On as they are called.

    Haiku in English has 3 lines from 10 up to 17 syllables, using a kire(cutting mark like punctuation) and a kigo(seasonal word, optional). The kire splits the haiku to show two distinct ideas, but related ones. :) A haiku desires to Show a concept rather than Tell it :D

    This is how I understand it, Rameshji.

  10. Thanks Leo, I am sure you found them Haikus..

  11. woops that's a tough one to understand but finally I think I got it 'strange words stumble' :)

  12. Strictly speaking a haiku - whether or not it adheres to the classic 5-7-5 syllables, which doesn't always work in a stressed language such as English - is about nature, and if the subject is otherwise, it becomes a senryu. But hey, who's counting! I love your positive attitude to life, Ramesh.